sleepy jack

Alright I'm doing the lyrical side of my demo right now and I'm curious for your thoughts. I've noticed sometimes that lyrics that are pretty direct are usually more effective than poetic lyrics but sometimes they're pretty cringeworthy which usually isn't a problem with poetic lyrics but it makes them hard to relate to because often times the lyrics just kind of slip by. So yeah what are your thoughts?

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Comus

Definitely depends on the song topic and style, hard rock definitely should have straight forward lyricisms, unless you want to do tongue in cheek songs about taboo subjects. While most progressive rock seems to work best with poetic often nonsensical lyrics.

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Hanging, spinning, aftermath
Your soft white flesh turns past me slaked with blood
Your evil eyes more damning than a demon's curse
Your lovely body soon caked with mud
As I carry you to your grave my arms your hearse
You stand before me defenceless
Your stare unchanging silent, cold, intense sears my brain

sleepy jack

My music is lo-fi bedroom acoustic type songs I should add that. Similar to early Bright Eyes except I don't scream or whine.

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Comus

Hmm, depending on the subject matter, acoustic songs are normally best telling a story in a rather straightforward way if it's on a topic with characters. However if it's about a specific subject matter or theme (love, hate, war, peace, death, sadness, depression, insanity, greed etc.) poetic lyricism works best

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You dangling swinging
Hanging, spinning, aftermath
Your soft white flesh turns past me slaked with blood
Your evil eyes more damning than a demon's curse
Your lovely body soon caked with mud
As I carry you to your grave my arms your hearse
You stand before me defenceless
Your stare unchanging silent, cold, intense sears my brain

savannah

personally, i lean twards more poetic lyrics,....and am astounded by the amount of people i run into who say things like 'i love that song, but i've never really listened to the words before'

are you freakin kiddin me?

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ghostonstage135

Well for me.... I have listened to a bunch of music that has 'poetic' lyrics... When I listened to Million Dead for the first time I noticed that a lot of the lyrics were more straight foward. It seemed that I had more of a personal connection with them because they didn't speak in riddles.

I think a lot of it has to do with how vunerable you want to make yourself as well. The more direct you are the more you let others that listen to your music into your life.

If I was doing it I would kind of mix it up and play with it. See what comes easier heh.

Wayfarer

Not really sure what you mean by "poetic".

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Lizzie

I know, I hate that, cuz for me, the lyrics are half the song. And poetic lyrics defnalty make a song just that much more better.

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savannah

i feel the same way,.....i've found the that music draws me in, but if i dont get anything out of the lyrical content i normally dont pursue it

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There ain't no chains strong enough to hold me; Ain't no breeze big enough to slow me; Never have seen a river that's too wide;Now there ain't no rope strong enough to bind me; Look for me, honey you will find me; I'll be there if you ever want me by your side. - Ray Price


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sleepy jack

Look at this:
Here is a scale, weigh it out
And you will find, easily
More than sufficient doubt
That these colors you see
Were picked in advance
By some careful hand
With an absolute concept of beauty
They are smeared and these blurs
Come in random order
To color the eyes of your former lovers
Hers were green like July
Except when she cried
They were red

In comparison to this:
Sometimes all I really want to feel is love
Sometimes I'm angry that I feel so angry
Sometimes my feelings get in the way
Of what I really feel I needed to say
If you stand in a circle
Then you'll all have a back to bite
Backlogged voices on the seven wonders
We're all so funny but he's lost his joke now
A communication from the one lined joke
A stand up comic and a rock musician
Making so much noise you don't know when to listen


I guess poetic isn't the right word since poetry can be pretty minimalistic at times but I figured people would get what I meant, flowing with imagery and flowery wording all that etc

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