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Old 12-23-2005, 05:40 PM  
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To Take New York In One Shot


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existence is another word
that means nothing to me anymore
my heart is on strings and wires
on display for the entire world
surrounded by the sound of
our voices
I hope your alone tonight
(chorus)like these negatives
you will develop into a perfect
image of what I want you to be
and like a match
struck to burn
myself alive
my voice screams your name
on this side of individuality
I look just like you
(chorus)
here in this tidal wave
we all know how you are
my time was well spent
and how heartfelt we were
in those black skies
but to me your still blue
(bridge)
In moments like these
we are as priceless
as these jewels
its another question left unanswered
(burn like our newborn sun)
wake up for the shattered lives we lead
(when we repair Ill make you)
I hope you drown in gasoline
(there was no error this time)
and ever since my love
shattered the sky
you lost your touch.
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Old 12-23-2005, 05:43 PM  
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I dont wanna be negative or anything but there are just too many parts that sounds corny...Ex "in those black skies, but your still blue to me"
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Old 12-23-2005, 05:50 PM  
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I like that part the best =/
I think its good though.
The "on this side of individuality" part is REALLY good a barely hear lines like that..
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Old 12-23-2005, 06:58 PM  
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corny?
I thought it was original
thanks man thats oen of my favorite line sin it.
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Old 12-23-2005, 06:59 PM  
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I dont know .... to me it just sounds like some of the things that some other people have put in their lyrics on MB..
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Old 12-23-2005, 07:01 PM  
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Whos in paticular?
To be honest i've barely seen any good lyrics on here.
Riseagainstrocks/Number12lookslikeme/A Perfect Sonnet in paticular write the good stuff.
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Old 12-23-2005, 07:05 PM  
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Ethan to tell you the truth i dont know...Ive seen it mostly from people who are here for like a week...but i said i didnt want to Offend anyone...so overall the song is alright
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Post them.
Cause to be honest all the n00b lyrics i've read have been.
"My life sucks
Im bleeding from my wrists
End my misery ex girlfriend
and blow my head off"
type of crap.
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RiseagainstRocks is an amazing lyricist
not to mention musician
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Old 12-23-2005, 07:13 PM  
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Alexisonfire
Post them.
Cause to be honest all the n00b lyrics i've read have been.
"My life sucks
Im bleeding from my wrists
End my misery ex girlfriend
and blow my head off"
type of crap.
Ill admit that you're correct with most of all the n00bs writing **** like that....and id rather not search for some with the lyrics in which i was refering too....just scratch what i said
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