my poems (title, quote, song, Hun, Hang)

madeinNY · 12-29-2005, 05:17 PM

I try

But seriously...my eyes. My granpa see's better than I do.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 05:23 PM

awwww

<that expresses my reaction to what ya said

madeinNY · 12-29-2005, 05:39 PM

I'm glad someone around here appreciates my humorous effort.

**sleepy jack** · 12-29-2005, 05:42 PM

Quit spamming and get back on topic christ.
and after going through the poems they're decent but the rhyming is a bit off sometimes.
It aint bad though.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 09:55 PM

rhyming is a bit off, its way off cause i wasnt even rhyming at all

**sleepy jack** · 12-29-2005, 10:12 PM

Poems tend to rhyme its usually what makes them good, and i didn't read the whole thread, i didn't see you say you didn't wanna make it rhyme.

madeinNY · 12-29-2005, 10:13 PM

Usually its the good poems that don't rhyme...IMHO.
My mom writes some kick ass poetry, she's won awards, none of her's rhymes.

TheBig3KilledMyRainDog · 12-29-2005, 10:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hobojesus

No wonder you lost your boyfriend if you gave him a dove.

lol. thats amazing. I hate you hobo, but thats good stuff.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 10:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alexisonfire

Poems tend to rhyme its usually what makes them good

yes some tend to. & rhyming to me, is not what makes them good.

Quote:

i didn't read the whole thread, i didn't see you say you didn't wanna make it rhyme

okay, but where did you see me indicate that i wanted it to?

**sleepy jack** · 12-29-2005, 10:53 PM

I think a poem needs rhyme and or flow to sound good and after reading these they had neither, and they weren't written flowerly.

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12-29-2005, 05:17 PM
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 461	I try But seriously...my eyes. My granpa see's better than I do. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-29-2005, 05:23 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	awwww <that expresses my reaction to what ya said __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

12-29-2005, 05:39 PM
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 461	I'm glad someone around here appreciates my humorous effort. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-29-2005, 05:42 PM
sleepy jack thom yorke disciple Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 18,069	Quit spamming and get back on topic christ. and after going through the poems they're decent but the rhyming is a bit off sometimes. It aint bad though. __________________ I sit in my house for days on end and stare at the roses in the closet.

12-29-2005, 09:55 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	rhyming is a bit off, its way off cause i wasnt even rhyming at all __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

12-29-2005, 10:12 PM
sleepy jack thom yorke disciple Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 18,069	Poems tend to rhyme its usually what makes them good, and i didn't read the whole thread, i didn't see you say you didn't wanna make it rhyme. __________________ I sit in my house for days on end and stare at the roses in the closet.

12-29-2005, 10:13 PM
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 461	Usually its the good poems that don't rhyme...IMHO. My mom writes some kick ass poetry, she's won awards, none of her's rhymes. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-29-2005, 10:53 PM
sleepy jack thom yorke disciple Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 18,069	I think a poem needs rhyme and or flow to sound good and after reading these they had neither, and they weren't written flowerly. __________________ I sit in my house for days on end and stare at the roses in the closet.