This poem (show, quote, suicide)

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 04:45 PM

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Originally Posted by this_guy

Oh crap my poem has know been caught with a teen trend because of its theme.

that didnt make any ****ing sense

this_guy · 12-29-2005, 04:55 PM

I just don't like the fact that you are emo and everything is emo if you write about death.

this_guy · 12-29-2005, 04:57 PM

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Originally Posted by Alexisonfire

Not the theme, the way you wrote it as i said their are alot of songs/poems on suicide that aren't cliche.

Like I said before I don't believe that is a good thing to say about peoples work as in the end everything will be cliche. What happens when everything is written about.

**sleepy jack** · 12-29-2005, 05:01 PM

Okay, sorry i thought when you posted this song you wanted to to be criticized guess i was wrong.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 05:02 PM

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Originally Posted by this_guy

I just don't like the fact that you are emo and everything is emo if you write about death.

Who are you talking to? & everything is not emo if you write about death.

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Originally Posted by this_guy

Like I said before I don't believe that is a good thing to say about peoples work as in the end everything will be cliche. What happens when everything is written about.

everything could be written about, but theres always different ways to put it.

this_guy · 12-29-2005, 05:05 PM

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Originally Posted by Alexisonfire

Okay, sorry i thought when you posted this song you wanted to to be criticized guess i was wrong.

It's not a song.

I know this is for criticizing but the fact that because I am aiming at what USUALLY happens it is being called a bad poem.

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 05:08 PM

its bad cause its not written in the right way.

this_guy · 12-29-2005, 05:10 PM

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Originally Posted by Crazy Luv

its bad cause its not written in the right way.

what exactly would be the right way

Crazy Luv · 12-29-2005, 05:17 PM

cut off the last stanza or just rewrite it. its going against what you're trying to say. its saying it was your fault, not theirs, which by what you told me, is not what you're trying to put out.

either/or · 12-30-2005, 02:17 AM

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Originally Posted by this_guy

as in the end everything will be cliche. What happens when everything is written about.

thats untrue. take a course in writing

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12-29-2005, 04:55 PM
this_guy Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: cumbernauld Posts: 97	I just don't like the fact that you are emo and everything is emo if you write about death.

12-29-2005, 05:01 PM
sleepy jack thom yorke disciple Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 18,069	Okay, sorry i thought when you posted this song you wanted to to be criticized guess i was wrong. __________________ I sit in my house for days on end and stare at the roses in the closet.

12-29-2005, 05:08 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	its bad cause its not written in the right way. __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

12-29-2005, 05:17 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	cut off the last stanza or just rewrite it. its going against what you're trying to say. its saying it was your fault, not theirs, which by what you told me, is not what you're trying to put out. __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real