Givin' It A Try (single, title, shows, quote, songs)

~~bungalowbill357~~ · 01-08-2006, 09:44 PM

Alrighty.
So, this is my first time puttin a song in here.
Im kinda nervous, but that is ok.
Here we go.

It has no title yet.
It is also incomplete, which is why Im putting it in here.
To get ideas on how to finish it.
This is most likely going to be done with a single acoustic guitar.
It is a "folky" song, or at least I want it to be.
It is missing something. I dont like the way some of it is worded.
Any help is appreciated.

here we go

I don't want to be around you
But at the same time, yes I do
Now you can see with your own eyes
All the choices I'm put through
But the drinkin' isnt helpin' cause I'm still so in love with you
I'll go walkin out the front door prayin' you'll let me come back through

How can you say its ok
That I'm tangled up in you
I'm leavin' in the morning
I thought you should know that we are through
I'll say all of my goodbyes then there is nothing left to do
I'll make my way out the back door just to come crawlin' back to you

I've been standing in the cold rain
Do you think you could let me in
Just don't mention last weekend
I dont want to get started on this again
'Cause no matter how good an argument it seems I never win
Then I'll make my way into your arms and we can....start all over again

ok, thats it.
It doesnt really have a solid ending which is something that I want to fix.
And, any suggestions for a title are appreciated.

**sleepy jack** · 01-08-2006, 09:50 PM

Its pretty weak.

I don't want to be around you
But at the same time, yes I do

It just bugs me, i can't really think of anything to fix it though..

~~bungalowbill357~~ · 01-08-2006, 10:10 PM

ok.
dont give me input.
i dont care.
in other words BUMP

either/or · 01-09-2006, 01:31 AM

hey i liked it. i can relate to the line of not wanting to be around you but also at the same time wanting to. like you know you have to get over a girl and in some way you wish you'd never see her again but your kinda addicted to her.

Crazy Luv · 01-09-2006, 01:26 PM

i like it too. It shows what...almost,most ppl. are going through in a relationship. Do you get what im trying to say?

creepinson · 01-09-2006, 04:21 PM

yo bill, if you post your songs here, expect them to get critted... i dont care who you are you need some freakin input... the songs not perfect, and shruggin it off like that and just waiting for someone to say they love it is no way to become a better writer... d|ck

(banned i am... yesss)

~~bungalowbill357~~ · 01-09-2006, 04:31 PM

I think you misunderstood what I said.
I said

Quote:

ok.
dont give me input.
i dont care.
in other words BUMP

Because nobody was giving it input, you know, no one was even posting in it, not because Alexisonfire said he didnt like the one line.
You took it out of context, therefore I will forgive you but.....dont be a dickhead or everyone will hate you

creepinson · 01-09-2006, 04:49 PM

meh youre still a d|ck... i dont like you and your song sucks

~~bungalowbill357~~ · 01-09-2006, 04:53 PM

Oh, well
In that case I hate you too.

**sleepy jack** · 01-09-2006, 04:54 PM

TIMEOUT!
Go to your corners
Creepinson just leave the thread if you don't like the song thats all you had to say.
Alex let it go.

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01-08-2006, 09:44 PM
~~bungalowbill357~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hot-lanta Posts: 2,749	Givin' It A Try Alrighty. So, this is my first time puttin a song in here. Im kinda nervous, but that is ok. Here we go. It has no title yet. It is also incomplete, which is why Im putting it in here. To get ideas on how to finish it. This is most likely going to be done with a single acoustic guitar. It is a "folky" song, or at least I want it to be. It is missing something. I dont like the way some of it is worded. Any help is appreciated. here we go I don't want to be around you But at the same time, yes I do Now you can see with your own eyes All the choices I'm put through But the drinkin' isnt helpin' cause I'm still so in love with you I'll go walkin out the front door prayin' you'll let me come back through How can you say its ok That I'm tangled up in you I'm leavin' in the morning I thought you should know that we are through I'll say all of my goodbyes then there is nothing left to do I'll make my way out the back door just to come crawlin' back to you I've been standing in the cold rain Do you think you could let me in Just don't mention last weekend I dont want to get started on this again 'Cause no matter how good an argument it seems I never win Then I'll make my way into your arms and we can....start all over again ok, thats it. It doesnt really have a solid ending which is something that I want to fix. And, any suggestions for a title are appreciated.

01-08-2006, 09:50 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,584	Its pretty weak. I don't want to be around you But at the same time, yes I do It just bugs me, i can't really think of anything to fix it though.. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

01-08-2006, 10:10 PM
~~bungalowbill357~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hot-lanta Posts: 2,749	ok. dont give me input. i dont care. in other words BUMP

01-09-2006, 01:31 AM
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 379	hey i liked it. i can relate to the line of not wanting to be around you but also at the same time wanting to. like you know you have to get over a girl and in some way you wish you'd never see her again but your kinda addicted to her. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

01-09-2006, 01:26 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	i like it too. It shows what...almost,most ppl. are going through in a relationship. Do you get what im trying to say? __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

01-09-2006, 04:21 PM
creepinson you are freakin out, man Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: ajax, ontario Posts: 135	yo bill, if you post your songs here, expect them to get critted... i dont care who you are you need some freakin input... the songs not perfect, and shruggin it off like that and just waiting for someone to say they love it is no way to become a better writer... d\|ck (banned i am... yesss)

01-09-2006, 04:49 PM
creepinson you are freakin out, man Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: ajax, ontario Posts: 135	meh youre still a d\|ck... i dont like you and your song sucks

01-09-2006, 04:53 PM
~~bungalowbill357~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hot-lanta Posts: 2,749	Oh, well In that case I hate you too.

01-09-2006, 04:54 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,584	TIMEOUT! Go to your corners Creepinson just leave the thread if you don't like the song thats all you had to say. Alex let it go. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.