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01-19-2006, 02:02 PM
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Join Date: Dec 2005
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A short song I wrote
Lions and Tigers and Bears
(Breathe Deep!) (You sold all our hopes!) (and I prepare defenses!) thank you my friend for taking my oxygen leaving me behind in the cold front as exposure sets in And as I stumble between seasons I won't trip over the winter snow (Darling!, your a mess!) (The cancer in our thoughts is murderous!) (The signs say stop!) I died in that intersection. It was the way the red lights blended with the yellow and the hybrid brightness shined through our cars like sun spots and we all died that night (Just like the movie stars!) ( )=screaming
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01-19-2006, 03:25 PM
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Music Addict
Join Date: Feb 2004
Location: JMU
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"The signs say stop" doesn't fit. Other than that, the death theme got kinda repetative. But good use of imagery.
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01-19-2006, 04:26 PM
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Join Date: Dec 2005
Posts: 56
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word.
Revision!
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01-19-2006, 08:54 PM
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Groupie
Join Date: Jan 2006
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Excellent.
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