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01-20-2006, 09:19 AM
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The Forums Sadistic Ghost
Join Date: Mar 2005
Location: beyond midnight, in the abyss of time, the syren in the night
Posts: 444
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A poem
Across the nightmare
in the darkness you find the light i only know my fear and blight across the nigtmare my love refined truth and light they intertwine my once sore thoughts my vindictive scars i die once again Among all the stars my thoughts betrayed the petals lie bare their broken in dream and wore from ware the truth be known in love and life it all becomes alittle trife
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01-20-2006, 08:13 PM
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you are freakin out, man
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: ajax, ontario
Posts: 135
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holy crap no definitions
although the rhythmic flow is acceptable (only barely, thanks to terribly forced rhymes) the flow between ideas is terrible nothing ties in with the last, and it just seems like a jumble of words... i would be amazed if you could tell me what its about, because it seems like you just did your best to piece some pretty words together... really cosmetic really shallow... have a nice ****in day |
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01-22-2006, 05:21 AM
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a l'amou fou pou tout
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: NY
Posts: 376
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It sounds pretty. but some of the words....yea...
& can you tell us the point, i wanna see if i got it right or not.
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Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel
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