He Climbed, Then he descened into the darkness (bling, quote)

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 01-25-2006, 06:45 PM

O how The Lovesick burn
in an eternal flame
Let us discend into the nothingness
You my love are the omega
And I, I am The Sun.
Let my fire cast hatred onto
these solemn streets.
And our hands lock like
these cells in which we keep our hearts.
The chords wrapped around our throat
spin with the thread of needles.
The Ultimatum from which were up against
is like an ocean in whihc we all drown.
And here you are once again
sweet, sweet apathy...

Crazy Luv · 01-26-2006, 06:45 PM

What the hell....please tell us what this is about..or what you were going for, or something.

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe · 01-26-2006, 07:23 PM

not all songs need to have meaning. this one may, simply because of the nature of it, but a lot of songs are just rambling.

i think this song is pretty good. it seems like it has some deeper meaning that is hidden by the sheer poetry of the song. good work.

Crazy Luv · 01-26-2006, 07:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe

not all songs need to have meaning. this one may, simply because of the nature of it, but a lot of songs are just rambling.

i think this song is pretty good. it seems like it has some deeper meaning that is hidden by the sheer poetry of the song. good work.

im wondering what the "deeper meaning" is

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe · 01-26-2006, 07:28 PM

maybe thats what he is aiming for. he doesnt want people to know the deeper meaning...he just wants them to think its there.

Crazy Luv · 01-26-2006, 07:30 PM

thats beautiful...really. but i would like to know what he has to say.

edit: he just wants them to think its there
isnt it he just wants them to think about it, not think its there. cause if you say that, that means he never had a deeper meaning that he didnt want ppl to know

jibber · 01-26-2006, 07:32 PM

the imagery is good, and I'm sure if I spent a little more time with ti I'd be able to tell what exactly you're conveying with this song, but it is a little garbled. The metaphors and symbols you use are all disconected from eachother, first it's omega and the sun, then chords and thread etc etc. That kind of writing can work well, but I think the problem is that because it's a shorter song, the metaphors themselves don't get a chance to fully develop.

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe · 01-26-2006, 07:35 PM

good point. but i think that it flows well, and its "abstractness" in the sense of the metaphors, make it good.

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01-25-2006, 06:45 PM
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	He Climbed, Then he descened into the darkness O how The Lovesick burn in an eternal flame Let us discend into the nothingness You my love are the omega And I, I am The Sun. Let my fire cast hatred onto these solemn streets. And our hands lock like these cells in which we keep our hearts. The chords wrapped around our throat spin with the thread of needles. The Ultimatum from which were up against is like an ocean in whihc we all drown. And here you are once again sweet, sweet apathy... __________________ My heart is on strings and wires

01-26-2006, 06:45 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	What the hell....please tell us what this is about..or what you were going for, or something. __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

01-26-2006, 07:30 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	thats beautiful...really. but i would like to know what he has to say. edit: he just wants them to think its there isnt it he just wants them to think about it, not think its there. cause if you say that, that means he never had a deeper meaning that he didnt want ppl to know __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

01-26-2006, 07:32 PM
jibber Freeskier Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Canuckistan Posts: 1,329	the imagery is good, and I'm sure if I spent a little more time with ti I'd be able to tell what exactly you're conveying with this song, but it is a little garbled. The metaphors and symbols you use are all disconected from eachother, first it's omega and the sun, then chords and thread etc etc. That kind of writing can work well, but I think the problem is that because it's a shorter song, the metaphors themselves don't get a chance to fully develop. __________________ What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER