I Knew Then (dance, Kiss, member, widow, quote)

**sleepy jack** · 01-30-2006, 09:43 PM

Your as beautiful as trama
Or a heart attack victim
You were my heaven on fire
This is to those blessed with
Trust and Forgiveness
For i could never believe her
A thousand curses to you
and your stupid love me eyes
Between you and me
I gave you my all
I surrender forever to you
I would jump from the sky
and trust you to catch me
But would you ever?
I searched for love in
the most unlikely places
Whores and hookers
Dark rooms and hotels
I found it that night
Over a year ago
I'd run to the ends of the earth
Sweat all my blood swimming
To look into your eyes again
My heart was put into a fragile state
The sand heated by glass
Fractured by your tender touch
Neck deep in an ocean of guilt
You were the titanic for me
Temporary solace but couldnt
Survive the long haul
You've opened my heart
With that key i've given you
And looked at my thoughts
My lies, my love
Now youve forgot to close it
I dreamt of you last night
As you traced my scars
As my rome burned
Did you ever care?
The ultraviolet lights
Flooded my thoughts
Like an ambulance bursting
Onto the street to save a victim
Our forever crashed hit the ground
Like the vase i broke in my youth
I had the loyalty of a bitch
I would've fought till death
As long as I pleased you
It would've been done
Through your words
i can feel its ending
I can see the passion is gone
I can see your to scared to break my heart
But i died years ago
No harm in breaking a dead thing
The bliss and joy of sleeping next to you
Is all gone, our love our passion is gone
The sun haunts my thoughts
I fell with my city
It all burned a fucking way
The locust came and ruined my crops
A city can not live without productivity
Same is said for the human body
A life is a terrible thing to waste
But you waste a way
You're nothing more then a whore
Im not one for crying
But I do not have the strength of a widow
For to me husbands have died
To many times, and i thought you'd live
But once again the lover falls
Sleeping in gutters roaming aimlessly
In my eyes the look of suicide
Im so sick of this, sick of dying
The romance is dead, and the dance is done
The musics been put away and our fun is gone
abandoned love and dead roses yet still
I remember kissing you that night in the rain
The drops rolled down your face like
Tears on a little kid scared of the dark
Your hair was matted like a beast in the wild
I knew then, i gave my life to you
I knew then that I love you
I knew then that i was fucked.

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe · 01-30-2006, 09:52 PM

interesting..thats pretty much all i have to say. it kinda just confused me. is there any significance to it?

**sleepy jack** · 01-30-2006, 09:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe

interesting..thats pretty much all i have to say. it kinda just confused me. is there any significance to it?

Sort of, random rant about a relationship turn into a song. So it kind of touches on a million in different points.

Crazy Luv · 01-31-2006, 09:04 PM

I liked it, but then again it confused me
And the...
I knew then, i gave my life to you
I knew then that I love you
I knew then that i was ****ed
part really killed it for me. i thought that should of been in the starting or...really not at all

jibber · 02-01-2006, 12:05 AM

^ I completely disagree. If those lines were at the begining, there would be nothing to build up towards for the rest of the song.

TrampInaTux · 02-01-2006, 03:38 AM

For me those last three lines were the only good point in the song. I'm sorry but I really didn't like it. It did feel like a random relationship rant that would only be specific to you, and something that only you would understand. It just never really connected with me.

Crazy Luv · 02-01-2006, 01:14 PM

I've read it again, & i was wrong with the put it in the starting thing. I like those three lines, but for some reason, it just leaves the whole thing with a "blah" feeling for me.

riseagainstrocks · 02-03-2006, 03:51 PM

Next time you post a song try and make it more readable, break it up and such.

it's decent, but all over the map. You're not coherent at all during this.

**sleepy jack** · 02-03-2006, 03:52 PM

Meh, I know.
The song sucks and is probaly one of the worst i've done.
So i may snag lines from it and just use it in multiple songs instead of one.

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01-30-2006, 09:43 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,561	I Knew Then Your as beautiful as trama Or a heart attack victim You were my heaven on fire This is to those blessed with Trust and Forgiveness For i could never believe her A thousand curses to you and your stupid love me eyes Between you and me I gave you my all I surrender forever to you I would jump from the sky and trust you to catch me But would you ever? I searched for love in the most unlikely places Whores and hookers Dark rooms and hotels I found it that night Over a year ago I'd run to the ends of the earth Sweat all my blood swimming To look into your eyes again My heart was put into a fragile state The sand heated by glass Fractured by your tender touch Neck deep in an ocean of guilt You were the titanic for me Temporary solace but couldnt Survive the long haul You've opened my heart With that key i've given you And looked at my thoughts My lies, my love Now youve forgot to close it I dreamt of you last night As you traced my scars As my rome burned Did you ever care? The ultraviolet lights Flooded my thoughts Like an ambulance bursting Onto the street to save a victim Our forever crashed hit the ground Like the vase i broke in my youth I had the loyalty of a bitch I would've fought till death As long as I pleased you It would've been done Through your words i can feel its ending I can see the passion is gone I can see your to scared to break my heart But i died years ago No harm in breaking a dead thing The bliss and joy of sleeping next to you Is all gone, our love our passion is gone The sun haunts my thoughts I fell with my city It all burned a fucking way The locust came and ruined my crops A city can not live without productivity Same is said for the human body A life is a terrible thing to waste But you waste a way You're nothing more then a whore Im not one for crying But I do not have the strength of a widow For to me husbands have died To many times, and i thought you'd live But once again the lover falls Sleeping in gutters roaming aimlessly In my eyes the look of suicide Im so sick of this, sick of dying The romance is dead, and the dance is done The musics been put away and our fun is gone abandoned love and dead roses yet still I remember kissing you that night in the rain The drops rolled down your face like Tears on a little kid scared of the dark Your hair was matted like a beast in the wild I knew then, i gave my life to you I knew then that I love you I knew then that i was fucked. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

01-31-2006, 09:04 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	I liked it, but then again it confused me And the... I knew then, i gave my life to you I knew then that I love you I knew then that i was **ed part really killed it for me. i thought that should of been in the starting or...really not at all __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight** We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

02-01-2006, 12:05 AM
jibber Freeskier Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Canuckistan Posts: 1,324	^ I completely disagree. If those lines were at the begining, there would be nothing to build up towards for the rest of the song. __________________ What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

02-01-2006, 03:38 AM
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,451	For me those last three lines were the only good point in the song. I'm sorry but I really didn't like it. It did feel like a random relationship rant that would only be specific to you, and something that only you would understand. It just never really connected with me.

02-01-2006, 01:14 PM
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 376	I've read it again, & i was wrong with the put it in the starting thing. I like those three lines, but for some reason, it just leaves the whole thing with a "blah" feeling for me. __________________ Gotta Problem Wit Me...SOLVE IT..Think Im Trippin...TIE MA SHOE..Cant Face Me..THEN TURN DA FUCK AROUND Though our hands are chained like they are They haven't taken music from us yet So that's how we'll fight We'll never apologize for saying what we feel Thats like apologizing just for being real

02-03-2006, 03:51 PM
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: JMU Posts: 3,151	Next time you post a song try and make it more readable, break it up and such. it's decent, but all over the map. You're not coherent at all during this. __________________ www.siegemusic.blogspot.com One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

02-03-2006, 03:52 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,561	Meh, I know. The song sucks and is probaly one of the worst i've done. So i may snag lines from it and just use it in multiple songs instead of one. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.