Crows (rock, quote)

**sleepy jack** · 02-06-2006, 04:22 PM

Crows pick at dead bodies, and
the trees are neothing but skeltons
the leaves are dead
as the sky and as we break
their bones under our feet
we're the survivors of the
genocide on the human race
and everything is dead but
the crows that pick at the
dead bodies, we look upon
the dead, and see their pale
faces, and their bodys twisted
In clumsy postioning of their
mutilated bodies, and their
skeltal frame bent out of
place and thats left is
me and the crows who continue
picking at their dead bodies.

riseagainstrocks · 02-07-2006, 02:42 PM

rather morbid

this line doesn make sense

Quote:

the leaves our shadows of their
former selves

and are you sure you didn't mean to say mutilated?

but overall it's not terrible. but it is rather unimaginative and bleak.

**sleepy jack** · 02-07-2006, 04:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by riseagainstrocks

rather morbid

this line doesn make sense

and are you sure you didn't mean to say mutilated?

but overall it's not terrible. but it is rather unimaginative and bleak.

My spelling blows with words like mutilated and im gonna fix that line up a bit later.

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02-06-2006, 04:22 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,373	Crows Crows pick at dead bodies, and the trees are neothing but skeltons the leaves are dead as the sky and as we break their bones under our feet we're the survivors of the genocide on the human race and everything is dead but the crows that pick at the dead bodies, we look upon the dead, and see their pale faces, and their bodys twisted In clumsy postioning of their mutilated bodies, and their skeltal frame bent out of place and thats left is me and the crows who continue picking at their dead bodies. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.