Your Silent Face (member, Hang)

angel18 · 02-21-2006, 01:29 PM

Your Silent Face

A thought that never changes
Remains a stupid lie
It's never been quite the same
No hearing or breathing
No movement, no colors
Just silence

Rise and fall of shame
A search that shall remain
We asked you what you'd seen
You said you didn't care

Sound formed in a vacuum
May seem a waste of time
It's always been just the same
No hearing or breathing
Just nothing

The sign that leads the way
The path we can not take
You've caught me at a bad time
So why don't you piss off

Crashing Sun · 03-13-2006, 09:14 AM

i tend to dislike angry poetry because someone hurt them... it's like you turn into the hulk but you need dr. banner there to keep everything in check.... you have to make it much more conscious and deliberate effort and have something to say.... this is art not therapy.

angel18 · 03-14-2006, 12:49 PM

ok not sure what u mean but thanx for the comment

Crashing Sun · 03-14-2006, 01:23 PM

i mean this feels a bit raw like you just started writing this out because you were angry. there's no reason why you can't go back and put some actual work into it. how does a thought that never changes remain a stupid lie? i just don't understand lines like that. you know what u mean but u have to make sure the reader knows too

Mr Slogan · 03-15-2006, 07:20 AM

i read ya stuff and i see ya replies ya got. just remember not everybody understands. but i do- i got cha message loud and clear. it's not out of anger- but to make a connection with an audience that can re-late. that's what writing is. the sun crashing guy did'nt get it- but keep at it- this ya boi slogan- i'm back ya heard me. Good job

Crashing Sun · 03-15-2006, 07:33 AM

awsome break it down for us mr. slackjaw, you tell us what that poem is saying my brother in moonshine.

angel18 · 03-15-2006, 11:30 AM

thanx for the comments slogan! i wrote this along time ago. if people don't understand it thats fine. but thanx for the comments crashin sun!

Jadix · 03-15-2006, 11:40 AM

I dont get it at all. Could you explain it a little?

angel18 · 03-15-2006, 11:44 AM

its about someone thats really angry and just in case people think its not about me! this boy feels really pissed off at everything and he just wants everyone to go and piss off. thats the only way i can explain it really. its been a long time since i wrote it about 2 years so

Crashing Sun · 03-15-2006, 12:25 PM

I just want to know what this line means cause I really didn't get it:

Quote:

A thought that never changes
Remains a stupid lie

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02-21-2006, 01:29 PM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	Your Silent Face Your Silent Face A thought that never changes Remains a stupid lie It's never been quite the same No hearing or breathing No movement, no colors Just silence Rise and fall of shame A search that shall remain We asked you what you'd seen You said you didn't care Sound formed in a vacuum May seem a waste of time It's always been just the same No hearing or breathing Just nothing The sign that leads the way The path we can not take You've caught me at a bad time So why don't you piss off

03-13-2006, 09:14 AM
Crashing Sun Idontthinkyouknow Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Out of the Frying Pan Posts: 103	i tend to dislike angry poetry because someone hurt them... it's like you turn into the hulk but you need dr. banner there to keep everything in check.... you have to make it much more conscious and deliberate effort and have something to say.... this is art not therapy. __________________ People Against People "Scientists in Taiwan say they have bred three pigs that glow in the dark." (Support Spam)

03-14-2006, 12:49 PM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	ok not sure what u mean but thanx for the comment

03-14-2006, 01:23 PM
Crashing Sun Idontthinkyouknow Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Out of the Frying Pan Posts: 103	i mean this feels a bit raw like you just started writing this out because you were angry. there's no reason why you can't go back and put some actual work into it. how does a thought that never changes remain a stupid lie? i just don't understand lines like that. you know what u mean but u have to make sure the reader knows too __________________ People Against People "Scientists in Taiwan say they have bred three pigs that glow in the dark." (Support Spam)

03-15-2006, 07:20 AM
Mr Slogan Groupie Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Dirty South, Marrero/New Orleans. LA Posts: 22	i read ya stuff and i see ya replies ya got. just remember not everybody understands. but i do- i got cha message loud and clear. it's not out of anger- but to make a connection with an audience that can re-late. that's what writing is. the sun crashing guy did'nt get it- but keep at it- this ya boi slogan- i'm back ya heard me. Good job

03-15-2006, 07:33 AM
Crashing Sun Idontthinkyouknow Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Out of the Frying Pan Posts: 103	awsome break it down for us mr. slackjaw, you tell us what that poem is saying my brother in moonshine. __________________ People Against People "Scientists in Taiwan say they have bred three pigs that glow in the dark." (Support Spam)

03-15-2006, 11:30 AM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	thanx for the comments slogan! i wrote this along time ago. if people don't understand it thats fine. but thanx for the comments crashin sun!

03-15-2006, 11:40 AM
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 143	I dont get it at all. Could you explain it a little?

03-15-2006, 11:44 AM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	its about someone thats really angry and just in case people think its not about me! this boy feels really pissed off at everything and he just wants everyone to go and piss off. thats the only way i can explain it really. its been a long time since i wrote it about 2 years so