Alive (house, quote, song)

angel18 · 04-26-2006, 11:57 AM

Alive

I've washed my conscience down the drain
But know I’ll never be the same
Dragged you through my house
A total stranger
Make you wish you hadn’t come
Never gonna make it home

Alive
Alive
Alive
Goodnight

You'll beg me to let you go but
I'm not that bright and not that slow
So shut up and stay quiet
I still haven't decided
What I will do
Make your worst nightmares come true

Alive
Alive
Alive
Goodnight

TrampInaTux · 04-30-2006, 03:25 PM

Chorus is awful and so is the You'll beg me to let you go but I'm not that bright and not that slow line.

swim · 04-30-2006, 06:18 PM

Nothing flows for me, rewrite it with different syllable counts or trash it.

smoggey2002 · 05-01-2006, 09:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hobojesus

Chorus is awful and so is the You'll beg me to let you go but I'm not that bright and not that slow line.

Yeh I Agree ^

angel18 · 05-01-2006, 09:50 AM

i'll leave it the way it is! thanx for the comments

smoggey2002 · 05-01-2006, 09:52 AM

Np Thats What Where Hear For Good Luck On Writing More In Future

angel18 · 05-01-2006, 09:55 AM

thanx smoggey, well swim and hobo don't get the point of the song/poem so i couldn't be bothered explaining it. if they were that good they would get the point and the style of the writing.

smoggey2002 · 05-01-2006, 10:04 AM

Yeh Hmm Maybe Explain Next Time ?

angel18 · 05-01-2006, 10:07 AM

well i think that i shouldn't have to it's not that hard to see what it's about and the style of writing i'm going for!

smoggey2002 · 05-01-2006, 10:09 AM

Yeh I Agree . But Some People See Things Differnt In Many Ways ? Like Look At Some Lyrics People Dont Get Them At All And Some People Do ! ! !

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04-26-2006, 11:57 AM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	Alive Alive I've washed my conscience down the drain But know I’ll never be the same Dragged you through my house A total stranger Make you wish you hadn’t come Never gonna make it home Alive Alive Alive Goodnight You'll beg me to let you go but I'm not that bright and not that slow So shut up and stay quiet I still haven't decided What I will do Make your worst nightmares come true Alive Alive Alive Goodnight

04-30-2006, 03:25 PM
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,457	Chorus is awful and so is the You'll beg me to let you go but I'm not that bright and not that slow line.

04-30-2006, 06:18 PM
swim Everyone Does Everything. Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: coastal plain North Carolina Posts: 4,396	Nothing flows for me, rewrite it with different syllable counts or trash it. __________________ you should be ashamed to be so proud of what you got http://www.mediafire.com/?ryxhwjmb1y9 http://www.mediafire.com/?g4wzjzjz1gu

05-01-2006, 09:50 AM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	i'll leave it the way it is! thanx for the comments

05-01-2006, 09:52 AM
smoggey2002 Groupie Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 15	Np Thats What Where Hear For Good Luck On Writing More In Future

05-01-2006, 09:55 AM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	thanx smoggey, well swim and hobo don't get the point of the song/poem so i couldn't be bothered explaining it. if they were that good they would get the point and the style of the writing.

05-01-2006, 10:04 AM
smoggey2002 Groupie Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 15	Yeh Hmm Maybe Explain Next Time ?

05-01-2006, 10:07 AM
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 135	well i think that i shouldn't have to it's not that hard to see what it's about and the style of writing i'm going for!

05-01-2006, 10:09 AM
smoggey2002 Groupie Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 15	Yeh I Agree . But Some People See Things Differnt In Many Ways ? Like Look At Some Lyrics People Dont Get Them At All And Some People Do ! ! !