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Old 05-18-2006, 02:41 PM  
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Default A Tale Of Two Titties.

Starting a fire without a match
you couldn't be that beautiful
there had to be a catch and there was
a man it seems had already taken your arm
Alright mate I'll back off everyone stay calm
We were only dancing it was harmless fun
I'll do up my trousers if you put back your gun, mate.
Tonight I came out expecting a couple of drinks
I don't know how it lead to this hang on let me think
I remember grinding along to the band
then this girl of yours dragged me away by the hand
and lead me closer to the stage
we got caught up in the mosh pit
and she said she couldn't stay so
I tumbled and we dived outside
where you was waiting to give her a ride
she didn't know though and she came on strong
she pushed her lips against mine and put my hand down her thong
and you came out with words bigger than your balls
but you pulled out a gun and you threatened us all
The girl blinded you with amazing technique
your soul was still angry but your dick was to weak
so you pointed to the car and said you'd take her back
and she nodded and followed you while brushing my lap
this is why you shouldn't live on drunken nights
loose girls, shaky tales and chaotic gun fights
just leave it.
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Old 05-18-2006, 03:25 PM  
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I liked it, up until the word trousers.
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Old 05-18-2006, 09:31 PM  
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That would sound really good over a 50cent beat sung by William Hung.

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Old 05-19-2006, 01:16 AM  
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^I'm not taking that as a compliment.
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Old 05-19-2006, 01:18 AM  
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"I'll do up my trousers if you put back your gun, mate."

Mate kind of seems like, out of place there, it kind of disrupts the flow, but this maybe a nationality thing seeing as I rarely hear mate..Other then that, I like it. 7/10
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Old 05-19-2006, 01:20 AM  
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Mate is a nationality thing... I was listening to The Streets new album when I wrote this, so it is different from other stuff I've done.
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Old 05-19-2006, 03:32 PM  
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^I'm not taking that as a compliment.
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it was just meant as a joke. When I read it...that was the image I got.
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But maybe I don't want to finish anything anymore..
maybe I can wait in bed 'til she comes home. and whispers....

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Remember kids: It's only real metal if the vocalist sounds like he's vomiting up a fetus. \m/
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Old 05-19-2006, 11:35 PM  
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I like it, i think a 6.5/10 will due for this
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Old 05-21-2006, 06:54 AM  
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I liked it really good Hobo!
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