Rolling Blues (rock)

Jadix · 05-22-2006, 05:04 PM

Any comments you have are appreciated. thanks

Sometimes it feels like I dont have a purpose
Like nothing inside has any worth
Like all I do is feel what hurts
But I cant point a finger

The lonely blues are the coldest
I find love but I cant hold it
It slips through my grip and is stolen
And like a rock, the blues start rollin

Repeatx2

Jadix · 06-08-2006, 09:49 PM

no feedback?

ZeppelinAir · 06-08-2006, 09:56 PM

what the hell inspired that, it is pretty good

mosesandtherubberducky · 06-08-2006, 11:20 PM

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It can use some work. Also might I suggest (so it has more content to it). www.dictionary.com and www.thesaurus.com .

05-22-2006, 05:04 PM	#1 (permalink)
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 140	Rolling Blues Any comments you have are appreciated. thanks Sometimes it feels like I dont have a purpose Like nothing inside has any worth Like all I do is feel what hurts But I cant point a finger The lonely blues are the coldest I find love but I cant hold it It slips through my grip and is stolen And like a rock, the blues start rollin Repeatx2

06-08-2006, 09:56 PM	#3 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	what the hell inspired that, it is pretty good __________________ not that old signature

06-08-2006, 11:20 PM	#4 (permalink)
mosesandtherubberducky butt say x Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: so i read the question as "Where YOU live" which was kinda funny instead of "Where you live" Posts: 1,649	cliched It can use some work. Also might I suggest (so it has more content to it). www.dictionary.com and www.thesaurus.com . __________________ Can I have a youtube video for a sig? There's a thing that says "Wrap [YOUTUBE] tags around selected text"

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06-08-2006, 09:49 PM	#2 (permalink)
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 140	no feedback?