You Can't Hang The Sun In A Hospital Ward (lyrics, titles)

**sleepy jack** · 05-26-2006, 06:39 PM

Oh, & when the doctors giving
You a cure, for cancer caused
By the last medication you
Were prescribed dont you think
Its time you started to question
His college degree health expertise?
When you're crying cause your
Wife wants fresh air, but the
Doctor says she'll be fine
Just make sure she gets lots
Of vitamin C, but trust me
Don't eat the orange take
This pill once a day please?
In a cold dark factory
They're "hepling" us live
In a cold dark factory
They're trying to give
You a cure, but a cure
Isn't anything, compared
To the self-inflicted harm
We're getting, we're not healthy
We're diseased, disgusting animals
We eat fat for lunch, and prefer
To find out how to be lazy in a
Brand new way well guess what?
This ends today, I wanna heal
My self, with mother nature
I wanna sleep under the stars
Instead of hospital bed, yeah
And what ive they make a mistake?
contaminate their labs
With fresh air and sunshine
Guess what? Its the only
Real cure worth finding
Its that antidote just outside
Your window, the one the
Experts couldn't figure out'
'Cause they've been too busy
Counting ceiling panels,
Analyzing blood and burying the
Bodies of the mice they've killed

TrampInaTux · 05-27-2006, 12:54 AM

Yeah...good. Different. Not one of your best, but it's pretty simple for your standards. And as you know, I like simple.

Crowe · 05-28-2006, 04:19 PM

Crowq, I can easily see this being an industrial song. Something...NIN would do. Very sharp. The way you wrote it seems more like a poem than lyrics, in a general aesthetic sense. Meaning that... there are no seperate choruses or the like (although you could easily point out to me, had I not thought of it myself, that not all written lyrics are governed by the laws of the written song) in which case I would cough and move deftly back to the corners of the MB boards.

**sleepy jack** · 05-28-2006, 04:24 PM

I never really have any structure to my songs unless I plan to put it to music, and right now this is just gonna be a written thing.

**right-track** · 05-28-2006, 04:29 PM

You Can't Hang The Sun In A Hospital Ward...love that title.

Merkaba · 05-29-2006, 04:39 AM

^ Yeah, copyright that title Ethan.

The song is good and the last few lines are probably strongest imo. Your writing is really comprehensive, as in the central theme is always constant and you have some good language use going on.

A wee quote I found that sorta ties in with your song. Pointless I know

Quote:

"Doctors pour drugs of which they know little, to cure diseases of which they know less, into human beings of which they know nothing."
-Voltaire

Crowe · 05-29-2006, 03:14 PM

Titles can't be copyrighted, unfortunately.

**sleepy jack** · 05-29-2006, 03:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowe

Titles can't be copyrighted, unfortunately.

I just gotta make it a hit song as soon as possible then if someone uses it, attack them for being unoriginal! =D

Crowe · 05-30-2006, 12:39 AM

I'll drink to that!

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05-26-2006, 06:39 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,552	You Can't Hang The Sun In A Hospital Ward Oh, & when the doctors giving You a cure, for cancer caused By the last medication you Were prescribed dont you think Its time you started to question His college degree health expertise? When you're crying cause your Wife wants fresh air, but the Doctor says she'll be fine Just make sure she gets lots Of vitamin C, but trust me Don't eat the orange take This pill once a day please? In a cold dark factory They're "hepling" us live In a cold dark factory They're trying to give You a cure, but a cure Isn't anything, compared To the self-inflicted harm We're getting, we're not healthy We're diseased, disgusting animals We eat fat for lunch, and prefer To find out how to be lazy in a Brand new way well guess what? This ends today, I wanna heal My self, with mother nature I wanna sleep under the stars Instead of hospital bed, yeah And what ive they make a mistake? contaminate their labs With fresh air and sunshine Guess what? Its the only Real cure worth finding Its that antidote just outside Your window, the one the Experts couldn't figure out' 'Cause they've been too busy Counting ceiling panels, Analyzing blood and burying the Bodies of the mice they've killed __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

05-27-2006, 12:54 AM
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,451	Yeah...good. Different. Not one of your best, but it's pretty simple for your standards. And as you know, I like simple.

05-28-2006, 04:19 PM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 726	Crowq, I can easily see this being an industrial song. Something...NIN would do. Very sharp. The way you wrote it seems more like a poem than lyrics, in a general aesthetic sense. Meaning that... there are no seperate choruses or the like (although you could easily point out to me, had I not thought of it myself, that not all written lyrics are governed by the laws of the written song) in which case I would cough and move deftly back to the corners of the MB boards. __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic

05-28-2006, 04:24 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,552	I never really have any structure to my songs unless I plan to put it to music, and right now this is just gonna be a written thing. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

05-29-2006, 03:14 PM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 726	Titles can't be copyrighted, unfortunately. __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic

05-30-2006, 12:39 AM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 726	I'll drink to that! __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic