That Man In The Corner (covers, quote, songs, Hang)

TrampInaTux · 07-02-2006, 04:39 AM

Left upon the shelf
Kept quietly to myself
If they ask you where I am
'He is not home right now'

Left inside my bed
Sitting up, uncomfy
Can you change my sheets please
They've been unwashed for days

CHORUS
Cannot, cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper
Cannot, cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper

Only my thoughts
Keep me from insanity
And the food on my plate
Which I've been playing with for a week

Another day has passed
With no human contact
Locked inside a bubble
Wishing I could shout

CHORUS
Cannot, cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper
Cannot, Cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper

Crazy Luv · 07-02-2006, 06:16 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hobojesus

Left upon the shelf
Kept quietly to myself
If they ask you where I am
'He is not home right now'

Left inside my bed
Sitting up, uncomfy
Can you change my sheets please
They've been unwashed for days

CHORUS
Cannot, cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper
Cannot, cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper

Only my thoughts
Keep me from insanity
And the food on my plate
Which I've been playing with for a week

Another day has passed
With no human contact
Locked inside a bubble
Wishing I could shout

CHORUS
Cannot, cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper
Cannot, Cannot hear you sir
Cannot hear you whisper

Bolded = like/likeish
Underlined = what??? don't you mean upon, how can you be inside it?

IMO, you should think of a better chorus, and fix up the last two lines of the Blue stanza

TrampInaTux · 07-02-2006, 02:04 PM

By inside my bed I mean inside my covers, I wrote the line like that because that's the way I speak.

**sleepy jack** · 07-05-2006, 03:29 PM

fooks sake, I didn't know which of your songs to comment on first.

I like it, im kind of jealious cause all your stuff rhymes/flows well which I suck with. I don't like the 'Wishing I could shout' like, shout out loud? Or something should be added 'cause it seems kind of weak to me.

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07-02-2006, 04:39 AM
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,457	That Man In The Corner Left upon the shelf Kept quietly to myself If they ask you where I am 'He is not home right now' Left inside my bed Sitting up, uncomfy Can you change my sheets please They've been unwashed for days CHORUS Cannot, cannot hear you sir Cannot hear you whisper Cannot, cannot hear you sir Cannot hear you whisper Only my thoughts Keep me from insanity And the food on my plate Which I've been playing with for a week Another day has passed With no human contact Locked inside a bubble Wishing I could shout CHORUS Cannot, cannot hear you sir Cannot hear you whisper Cannot, Cannot hear you sir Cannot hear you whisper

07-02-2006, 02:04 PM
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,457	By inside my bed I mean inside my covers, I wrote the line like that because that's the way I speak.

07-05-2006, 03:29 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,244	fooks sake, I didn't know which of your songs to comment on first. I like it, im kind of jealious cause all your stuff rhymes/flows well which I suck with. I don't like the 'Wishing I could shout' like, shout out loud? Or something should be added 'cause it seems kind of weak to me. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.