I Need To Quit Writing Love Songs.. =/ (Kiss, titles)

**sleepy jack** · 07-21-2006, 03:35 AM

& I need to come up with titles easier...

Celestial fires against a black sky,
Can't we just sit down tonight and pretend we'll never die?
Now theres an old oak bench by the lakeside,
'Neath the pines and we'll sit on it and rest,
I'll recite poems about you and you can tell me
You think i'm better then conor and i'll laugh
And tell you its not true, and we can fight on the shore,
Arguing over who loves who more, and when we stop,
You on top of I, i'll kiss you and never forget,
I gave you my heart down by the lakeside.

Now its getting a bit late this summer chill has gotten to me,
So lets walk into the dark and i'll your hold hand,
Then tell you I love you, and you can tell me the same,
The trees look scary like the monster you never see,
But i'll pretend to be brave 'cause I wanna impress you,
It starts to rain, yet only gently you kiss my cheek,
Give me a quick smile and say 'race you to the gate'
I'll never tell you so, but I lagged behind to let you win,
I took the loving harassment like a mountain takes the sun,
I'll love you and smile as you tell me you won,
As we enter the cabin, and light up a fire,
Ill stand back and smile did I ever tell you,
How pretty you look drying off by the fireside?
Yeah i'll never forget, I gave you a kiss by the fireside,
And looking into your eyes, I smiled
Blue always was my favorite color.

Also, sorry I havn't been posting in here much lately...I really have no excuse, just sorry.

gabbagabba_hey · 07-21-2006, 11:35 AM

aw

that was so sweet......

i like it

.angie. · 07-21-2006, 01:03 PM

I like it.
it's pretty.
=)

the Conor part makes me laugh.
heh..

adidasss · 07-21-2006, 01:34 PM

thumbs up....

( although, do try to arrange it so that we can tell the rhymes better ..if there are any )

**LesPaul43** · 07-21-2006, 01:38 PM

Ethan..Killer love song..you're such a weiner now

Just kidding...its great though

bruise_violet · 07-21-2006, 04:16 PM

Oh my, that is lovely!

BlueEyedSuicide · 07-21-2006, 05:29 PM

Ethan, it's beautiful like always..
I think this is my favorite one yet.
&There have been quite a few.
I love this;

I'll never tell you so, but I lagged behind to let you win,
I took the loving harassment like a mountain takes the sun,
I'll love you and smile as you tell me you won,

**sleepy jack** · 07-21-2006, 05:32 PM

Awww, thank you guys.

Quote:

Originally Posted by adidasss

thumbs up....

( although, do try to arrange it so that we can tell the rhymes better ..if there are any )

I can't rhyme, I don't really want to. Every time I see a poem or something and every other line rhymes, or every line. I kind of instantly hate it, I don't know why but I prefer a nice flow over rhyming.

adidasss · 07-22-2006, 05:53 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

Awww, thank you guys.

I can't rhyme, I don't really want to. Every time I see a poem or something and every other line rhymes, or every line. I kind of instantly hate it, I don't know why but I prefer a nice flow over rhyming.

oh ok...i just thought that you arranged it strangly...cos every time you asked for an opinion via msn, you poems tended to rhyme...

Raine · 07-22-2006, 05:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

Now its getting a bit late this summer chill has gotten to me,
So lets walk into the dark and i'll hold your hand,
Then tell you I love you, and you can tell me the same,
The trees look scary like the monster you never see,
But i'll pretend to be brave 'cause I wanna impress you,
It starts to rain, yet only gently you kiss my cheek,
Give me a quick smile and say 'race you to the gate'
I'll never tell you so, but I lagged behind to let you win,
I took the loving harassment like a mountain takes the sun,
I'll love you and smile as you tell me you won,
As we enter the cabin, and light up a fire,
Ill stand back and smile did I ever tell you,
How pretty you look drying off by the fireside?
Yeah i'll never forget, I gave you a kiss by the fireside,
And looking into your eyes, I smiled
Blue always was my favorite color.

"hold" is in red because you forgot to put that in there.
At any rate, I liked it. A lot.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

I can't rhyme, I don't really want to. Every time I see a poem or something and every other line rhymes, or every line. I kind of instantly hate it, I don't know why but I prefer a nice flow over rhyming.

You're prone to sporadic end rhyme. You use lots of internal rhyme. Your probably don't know it but if you studied poetry, your favorite kind of poem would probably be an Italian Sonnet.

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07-21-2006, 03:35 AM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,552	I Need To Quit Writing Love Songs.. =/ & I need to come up with titles easier... Celestial fires against a black sky, Can't we just sit down tonight and pretend we'll never die? Now theres an old oak bench by the lakeside, 'Neath the pines and we'll sit on it and rest, I'll recite poems about you and you can tell me You think i'm better then conor and i'll laugh And tell you its not true, and we can fight on the shore, Arguing over who loves who more, and when we stop, You on top of I, i'll kiss you and never forget, I gave you my heart down by the lakeside. Now its getting a bit late this summer chill has gotten to me, So lets walk into the dark and i'll your hold hand, Then tell you I love you, and you can tell me the same, The trees look scary like the monster you never see, But i'll pretend to be brave 'cause I wanna impress you, It starts to rain, yet only gently you kiss my cheek, Give me a quick smile and say 'race you to the gate' I'll never tell you so, but I lagged behind to let you win, I took the loving harassment like a mountain takes the sun, I'll love you and smile as you tell me you won, As we enter the cabin, and light up a fire, Ill stand back and smile did I ever tell you, How pretty you look drying off by the fireside? Yeah i'll never forget, I gave you a kiss by the fireside, And looking into your eyes, I smiled Blue always was my favorite color. Also, sorry I havn't been posting in here much lately...I really have no excuse, just sorry. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

07-21-2006, 11:35 AM
gabbagabba_hey Dont Get Raped In Cancun Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: land of treason Posts: 193	aw that was so sweet...... i like it __________________ go on out get some more go on out to the bar the market or the liquor store friends dont let friends get lost in chinatown

07-21-2006, 01:03 PM
.angie. contrast&compare. Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 689	I like it. it's pretty. =) the Conor part makes me laugh. heh.. __________________ Jesus Christ, I'm alone again, so what did you do those three days you were dead?

07-21-2006, 01:34 PM
adidasss deadbeat Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Croatia Posts: 4,658	thumbs up.... ( although, do try to arrange it so that we can tell the rhymes better ..if there are any ) __________________

07-21-2006, 01:38 PM
LesPaul43 Bring da Ruckus Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: British Columbia Posts: 4,011	Ethan..Killer love song..you're such a weiner now Just kidding...its great though __________________ Life's not a bitch life is a beautiful woman You only call her a bitch because she won't let you get that pussy Maybe she didn't feel y'all shared any similar interests When Life Gives You Lemons, You Paint That Shit Gold

07-21-2006, 04:16 PM
bruise_violet we became a carcass! Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Yorkshire Posts: 359	Oh my, that is lovely! __________________ in love with the stumps, in love with the bleeding! in love with the pain that you now feel...

07-21-2006, 05:29 PM
BlueEyedSuicide Arienette Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Minnesota Posts: 52	Ethan, it's beautiful like always.. I think this is my favorite one yet. &There have been quite a few. I love this; I'll never tell you so, but I lagged behind to let you win, I took the loving harassment like a mountain takes the sun, I'll love you and smile as you tell me you won, __________________ ethan (is this death really you?) says: jes id fly oover there and slap you except moer like poke you cause, slapping hurts ethan (is this death really you?) says: but i wouldnt poke you gently! it would be a non-painful but still noticeable kind of a poke