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07-22-2006, 03:11 PM
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that's my war face.
Join Date: Nov 2005
Posts: 1,451
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Reach Out
It's dangerous where we're at right now
Taking it in turns to start the rows See I know you oh so well Which makes it harder to leave It's a scary place to be we know At the end but not letting go I've got your things and they're staying with me All of us huddled round the bar the tables have gone and it's left a mark With no one near me I can drown myself And you can't say anything Leave me to die I say with a sigh I don't know cos I haven't said goodbye I rub your ego and you rub my back While it's all going down the sink.... (Down the sink now) CHORUS Reach out and touch me tonight Not there, not there yet but you'll be alright Reach out and touch me tonight Not there, not there yet but you'll be alright Sparkling water is all I'm having Which arse tonight will I be grabbing? Not yours, cos you're the one I like Jealousy is new to me I've felt it now so I'm free Within myself and my rights Plastic wrapping sugar coated Think of a love song tonight I've wrote it Glass in hand putting on a show Freedom fighter morning rewriter Object of my desire Come close and I won't let you go CHORUS Reach out and touch me tonight Not there, not there yet but you'll be alright Reach out and touch me tonight Not there, not there yet but you'll be alright |
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07-22-2006, 04:21 PM
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Bone Machine
Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: Jesusland
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I like it alot. The only problem I have with it is,
Jealousy is new to me I've felt it now so I am free It seems kind of forced, maybe i'm instead of I am? Maybe its just how you talk thing, but it doesn't sound right to me.
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07-22-2006, 04:32 PM
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that's my war face.
Join Date: Nov 2005
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Editted for your viewing pleasure!
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07-22-2006, 08:45 PM
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Bone Machine
Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: Jesusland
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Ahh thank you, love it now.
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07-23-2006, 08:00 AM
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Groupie
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: scotland
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i think this is a great song. how do you write songs like this? experience? are they made up on the spot?
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07-24-2006, 02:16 AM
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that's my war face.
Join Date: Nov 2005
Posts: 1,451
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This song was made up on the spot... I usually do that for a lot of the songs I put up on MB, cos it's easier to think of new songs when typing because you haven't got the hassle of scribbling out lines etc.
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07-24-2006, 02:53 AM
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w0rd
Join Date: Apr 2006
Location: Suva, Fiji
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Lol the chorus acctually reminds me of Someday by Nickelback, I dunno why but it does
Good job Hobo |
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07-24-2006, 03:27 AM
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Groupie
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: scotland
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great sig blainka
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07-24-2006, 02:09 PM
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They call me Tundra Boy
Join Date: Sep 2005
Location: In your linen cupboard.
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I've recorded the song down now Hobo. It'll be up at:
www.myspace.com/imjustsingin In the next ten minutes or so, provided myspace doesn't go all **** on us again. I structured the lyrics and removed a section, to make it a better length. I changed a bit of the chorus too, to improve the musical phrasing. Now the lyrics are: VERSE It's dangerous where we're at right now Taking it in turns to start the rows See I know you so well Which makes it harder to leave It's a scary place to be we know At the end but not letting go I've got your things They'll be staying with me VERSE All of us huddled round the bar the tables have gone and it's left a mark Drown myself here And you can't say anything Leave me to die I say with a sigh That’s all you’re getting, I’m not saying goodbye Pour my emotions with the ***s and dregs Down the sink.... CHORUS Reach out And touch me tonight Not there Yet but you'll be alright Reach out And touch me tonight I’ll wait impatiently For… For… VERSE Plastic wrapping sugar coated Think of a love song tonight I've wrote it Glass in hand Putting on a show Freedom fighter, morning rewriter Object of my desire Come close And I won't let you go CHORUS Reach out And touch me tonight Not there Yet but you'll be alright Reach out And touch me tonight I’ll wait impatiently For… For…
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07-24-2006, 02:10 PM
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that's my war face.
Join Date: Nov 2005
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CHEEEEEEEERS
Did you sing it? |
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