Red Sky at Night (jazz, Eminem, effect, quote, song)

creepinson · 07-27-2006, 08:58 PM

Red sky at night
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I was screaming and kneeling
Subsiding and sealing
My feet in the ground
Now I’ll never be found

And you told me

There’s something more to this hurt
Than a friend in the dirt
More than water in rain
More than blood in this stain

And you were wrong

I could see we both knew why,
As the sky seemed to fly by

(Chorus)
I kept my
Feet in the ground
And my friend in the dirt
Now we’ll never be found
But loneliness is worse

I like to think you taught me something
About pity
That it is nothing more for you
Than to hold onto

Something to hold as grief whispers in my ear
As this pity, your stability
Holds me near

(Chorus)

And now you’re underground

And you are dead
And you are dead
And life is dead
And life is dead

My life is dead

But I’ll always be here

With my
Feet in the ground
And my soul in the dirt
Though I’ll never be found
I will cherish this curse
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wow i havent been on here for awhile... whatever guys you know the drill c4c and all that cwazy jazz, i got this song from re-writing another, although im not sure if i had posted the original song on here before... man it was crap

**sleepy jack** · 07-27-2006, 09:00 PM

I like to think you taught me something
About pity
That it is nothing more for you
Than to hold onto

I like that bit, it was good.

~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ · 07-27-2006, 09:06 PM

I like this, nice flow.
The rhyming sounded forced in one or two places, but over all it was very good.

Oh, and, Ethan, out of curiosity, why is that tdoc quote in your sig?

**sleepy jack** · 07-27-2006, 09:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rabid Sea Turtles

Oh, and, Ethan, out of curiosity, why is that tdoc quote in your sig?

Because it amuses me.

Raine · 07-28-2006, 10:58 AM

I liked it. Not too visual but descriptive enough that you could imagine this going on.
It reminds mea litle of that song by Eminem. I think it's called Skeletons in the Closet or probably something to that effect

Pretty cool actually.

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07-27-2006, 08:58 PM
creepinson you are freakin out, man Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: ajax, ontario Posts: 128	Red Sky at Night Red sky at night ----------------------------- I was screaming and kneeling Subsiding and sealing My feet in the ground Now I’ll never be found And you told me There’s something more to this hurt Than a friend in the dirt More than water in rain More than blood in this stain And you were wrong I could see we both knew why, As the sky seemed to fly by (Chorus) I kept my Feet in the ground And my friend in the dirt Now we’ll never be found But loneliness is worse I like to think you taught me something About pity That it is nothing more for you Than to hold onto Something to hold as grief whispers in my ear As this pity, your stability Holds me near (Chorus) And now you’re underground And you are dead And you are dead And life is dead And life is dead My life is dead But I’ll always be here With my Feet in the ground And my soul in the dirt Though I’ll never be found I will cherish this curse ------------------------ wow i havent been on here for awhile... whatever guys you know the drill c4c and all that cwazy jazz, i got this song from re-writing another, although im not sure if i had posted the original song on here before... man it was crap

07-27-2006, 09:00 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,244	I like to think you taught me something About pity That it is nothing more for you Than to hold onto I like that bit, it was good. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

07-27-2006, 09:06 PM
~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: In the sea... Posts: 255	I like this, nice flow. The rhyming sounded forced in one or two places, but over all it was very good. Oh, and, Ethan, out of curiosity, why is that tdoc quote in your sig?

07-28-2006, 10:58 AM
Raine Full-Time Hellion Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: PA Posts: 1,508	I liked it. Not too visual but descriptive enough that you could imagine this going on. It reminds mea litle of that song by Eminem. I think it's called Skeletons in the Closet or probably something to that effect Pretty cool actually. __________________ A pair of powerful spectacles has sometimes sufficed to cure a person in love. ~ Friedrich Nietzsche