When In Rome Do As The Romans Do But Sadly Its All Spanish To Me (Queen, quote)

**sleepy jack** · 08-14-2006, 06:05 PM

When In Rome Do As The Romans Do But Sadly Its All Spanish To Me

I long to see myself reflected in those
Pools of a tranquil spring forest,
But I dream of the impossible,
Yet I still pleasure myself with
Thoughts of you being my queen,
But life isn't a child storys and i'd
Probaly stumble on my flowing cape,
Trip, fall, then drown in the moat
But at least I get to float around you,
Though that'd be tragic, its nothing dramatic,
For a real heroes death would be valiant and true,
Unlike these words I translate from my brain,
Turn them into ink, and a cliche' metaphor
On a page about how seeing you hurts more
Then this obvious lack of oxygen.

And why, my dear do we always
Shoot first, ask questions later?
Was it because were nothing
More then fish in a barrel?
Yet hells frozen over, and were
Just walking on thin ice,
I guess our lucks ran out
Was the president lying face down?
Yeah, my own intelligence,
Obsession with pretension make
Me appear as clever as a rabbit,
But im really just the foot around your neck,
Asking the most obvious questions, is the sky blue?
Cause im flying tonight and although sticks
And stones won't break my bones
These words are setting me up for a crash landing.

**LesPaul43** · 08-14-2006, 06:15 PM

I like it...its not one of my favourites...but i do like it

_Spinning_ · 08-14-2006, 07:51 PM

Good work, Ethan.

You've written better, but this is still great.

Well done.

Crowe · 08-14-2006, 09:33 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

When In Rome Do As The Romans Do But Sadly Its All Spanish To Me

I long to see myself reflected in those
Pools of a tranquil spring forest,
But I dream of the impossible,
Yet I still pleasure myself with
Thoughts of you being my queen,
But life isn't a child storys and i'd
Probaly stumble on my flowing cape,
Trip, fall, then drown in the moat
But at least I get to float around you,
Though that'd be tragedic, its nothing dramatic,
For a real heroes death would be valiant and true,
Unlike these words I translate from my brain,
Turn them into ink, and a cliche' metaphor
On a page about how seeing you hurts more
Then this obvious lack of oxygen.

And why, my dear do we always
Shoot first, ask questions later?
Was it because were nothing
More then fish in a barrel?
Yet hells frozen over, and were
Just walking on thin ice,
I guess our lucks ran out
Was the president lying face down?
Yeah, my own intelligence,
Obsession with pretension make
Me appear as clever as a rabbit,
But im really just the foot around your neck,
Asking the most obvious questions, is the sky blue?
Cause im flying tonight and although sticks
And stones won't break my bones
These words are setting me up for a crash landing.

Gonna go straight down the bolds...

1. Just lame and way way overdone. Comparing a girls eyes to pools of anything is stabbing yourself in the back. Don't betray your own intelligence, you can do better than that Crow!

2. Not a word. Tragic is though.

3. A better word for that sentiment might be transpose.

4. We're, maybe?

5. This feels like it came out of nowhere.... what is this line doing?

6. What does that mean? I'm not saying I dislike it, really, it's just a saying I've never heard before.

Like everyone has said, you've written better, but this isn't bad. I like the idea of a fairytale - but then you kind of teetered off.

And now that I reread it... this might as well be two different songs. There is little connection between the two verses... not even an emotion, in my opinion... uh, I think you were trying really hard to stuff this full of puns, and some fancy word play... but it was really distracting from the point of the song.... I think that you could revamp it and come out with something pretty nice.

**sleepy jack** · 08-14-2006, 09:40 PM

1. Working on it, working on it.
2. >.> I spent like five minutes trying to figure that damn word out thanks.
3. Changed
4. Changed
5. You know how you pick up a penny on the ground for goodluck if its heads up? I figure it went with the badluck line..
6. Like a rabbits foot around your neck for goodluck.

And yeah, reading back I may just break those two apart..

Crowe · 08-15-2006, 01:25 AM

Oh ok, I like those lines now. Very good

- yeah, split them up, and instead of one good song, you get two! I think you'll like the outcome more.

**sleepy jack** · 08-15-2006, 02:32 PM

Alrightt, I kind of changed the theme around two seperate ones and yes i'm more pleased with these as indiviuals..

When In Rome Do As The Romans Do But Sadly Its All Spanish To Me

I long to see myself reflecting in your eyes as brown as bark,
But I long for the impossible still though,
I pleasure myself With dreams of you being my queen,
Really, our love was never meant to be,
And romance isn't a childs story if it was my armor would weigh me down,
I'd probaly trip, fall, then drown in the moat
But i'd least i'd get to float to you,
And though that'd be tragic its nothing dramatic,
For a heroes death should be true and valiant,
And all I really am is sad and lonely for your love,
And these words I transpose from my own mind
Can't make up for our lost time,
Though they turn to Into ink on a page,
All I'm really saying is
Seeing you hurts more then this obvious lack of oxygen.

In My Mind, I'm Probably The Biggest Sex Maniac You Ever Saw

And why my dear do we always shoot first and ask questions later?
Is it becasue, really we're just fish in a barrel?
You see, when we left those notes to our parents,
With these ideas of marriage, vegas and happily ever after.
Hell had indeed frozen over, but still were walking on thin ice,
And we've been left somewhat clueless,
Askin the most obvious question, whys the sky blue?
And though sticks and stones won't bring down a plane,
Running away is setting us up for a crash landing.

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08-14-2006, 06:05 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,373	When In Rome Do As The Romans Do But Sadly Its All Spanish To Me When In Rome Do As The Romans Do But Sadly Its All Spanish To Me I long to see myself reflected in those Pools of a tranquil spring forest, But I dream of the impossible, Yet I still pleasure myself with Thoughts of you being my queen, But life isn't a child storys and i'd Probaly stumble on my flowing cape, Trip, fall, then drown in the moat But at least I get to float around you, Though that'd be tragic, its nothing dramatic, For a real heroes death would be valiant and true, Unlike these words I translate from my brain, Turn them into ink, and a cliche' metaphor On a page about how seeing you hurts more Then this obvious lack of oxygen. And why, my dear do we always Shoot first, ask questions later? Was it because were nothing More then fish in a barrel? Yet hells frozen over, and were Just walking on thin ice, I guess our lucks ran out Was the president lying face down? Yeah, my own intelligence, Obsession with pretension make Me appear as clever as a rabbit, But im really just the foot around your neck, Asking the most obvious questions, is the sky blue? Cause im flying tonight and although sticks And stones won't break my bones These words are setting me up for a crash landing. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

08-14-2006, 06:15 PM
LesPaul43 Bring da Ruckus Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: British Columbia Posts: 3,988	I like it...its not one of my favourites...but i do like it __________________ Life's not a bitch life is a beautiful woman You only call her a bitch because she won't let you get that pussy Maybe she didn't feel y'all shared any similar interests When Life Gives You Lemons, You Paint That Shit Gold

08-14-2006, 09:40 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,373	1. Working on it, working on it. 2. >.> I spent like five minutes trying to figure that damn word out thanks. 3. Changed 4. Changed 5. You know how you pick up a penny on the ground for goodluck if its heads up? I figure it went with the badluck line.. 6. Like a rabbits foot around your neck for goodluck. And yeah, reading back I may just break those two apart.. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

08-15-2006, 01:25 AM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 715	Oh ok, I like those lines now. Very good - yeah, split them up, and instead of one good song, you get two! I think you'll like the outcome more. __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic

08-15-2006, 02:32 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,373	Alrightt, I kind of changed the theme around two seperate ones and yes i'm more pleased with these as indiviuals.. When In Rome Do As The Romans Do But Sadly Its All Spanish To Me I long to see myself reflecting in your eyes as brown as bark, But I long for the impossible still though, I pleasure myself With dreams of you being my queen, Really, our love was never meant to be, And romance isn't a childs story if it was my armor would weigh me down, I'd probaly trip, fall, then drown in the moat But i'd least i'd get to float to you, And though that'd be tragic its nothing dramatic, For a heroes death should be true and valiant, And all I really am is sad and lonely for your love, And these words I transpose from my own mind Can't make up for our lost time, Though they turn to Into ink on a page, All I'm really saying is Seeing you hurts more then this obvious lack of oxygen. In My Mind, I'm Probably The Biggest Sex Maniac You Ever Saw And why my dear do we always shoot first and ask questions later? Is it becasue, really we're just fish in a barrel? You see, when we left those notes to our parents, With these ideas of marriage, vegas and happily ever after. Hell had indeed frozen over, but still were walking on thin ice, And we've been left somewhat clueless, Askin the most obvious question, whys the sky blue? And though sticks and stones won't bring down a plane, Running away is setting us up for a crash landing. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.