The Light At The End... (dancing, dance, Ching)

**sleepy jack** · 10-13-2006, 04:21 PM

I think my writings about to go through a major period of clicheism.

And sorry for posting two in one day, something kind of happened and I wanted to write about it...

The Light At The End Of The Tunnel Was Just The Shine Of A Bullet Waiting To Kill

She came into my life, a cool breeze on summers day,
We spent our days together talking of forever,
The jokes we shared, and things we said,
I don't think i've ever been happier with you,
page ninety nine playing in the background,
I watch my cigarette burn down,
As the alcohol floods through the mazes of my mind.

Its funny, my greatest joy is my greatest sorrow,
I let the cigarette burn my arm to see if it would hurt,
But no, I don't think it compared to the loss I now feel,
Its like a part of me is gone,
Like all my love is lost.

Oh Angel where did we go wrong?
The tears continue to dance on my cheeks,
My entire world has been shattered,
And I believe my skin is following that now,
Oh please, just talk to me,
Life wouldn't be the same
Without you dancing with me through sorrow,
Holding my hand in the dark,
And loving me every step of the way.

You showed me things i'd never known before,
And taught me what love really was,
And now our cabin by the lakeside has left us,
As I view the ruin from the shore,
Forming streams and watching them trickle
And add to the destroyed scene,
Walking in, to let the water dance against me,
It feels good, to lose the air in my lungs,
After losing the love in my heart,
I suppose its time to run away,
I think my hearts on empty,
But i'll use the last of the love you gave me to press on,
My eyes are dry now, I guess thats a sign,
Its time to leave this place, farewell my love
And so long.

Crowe · 10-13-2006, 04:28 PM

Take the **** this sucks comment down. Don't discount your own writing.

**sleepy jack** · 10-13-2006, 07:15 PM

Urgh, >.> fine.

Anyother thoughts?

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10-13-2006, 04:21 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,242	The Light At The End... I think my writings about to go through a major period of clicheism. And sorry for posting two in one day, something kind of happened and I wanted to write about it... The Light At The End Of The Tunnel Was Just The Shine Of A Bullet Waiting To Kill She came into my life, a cool breeze on summers day, We spent our days together talking of forever, The jokes we shared, and things we said, I don't think i've ever been happier with you, page ninety nine playing in the background, I watch my cigarette burn down, As the alcohol floods through the mazes of my mind. Its funny, my greatest joy is my greatest sorrow, I let the cigarette burn my arm to see if it would hurt, But no, I don't think it compared to the loss I now feel, Its like a part of me is gone, Like all my love is lost. Oh Angel where did we go wrong? The tears continue to dance on my cheeks, My entire world has been shattered, And I believe my skin is following that now, Oh please, just talk to me, Life wouldn't be the same Without you dancing with me through sorrow, Holding my hand in the dark, And loving me every step of the way. You showed me things i'd never known before, And taught me what love really was, And now our cabin by the lakeside has left us, As I view the ruin from the shore, Forming streams and watching them trickle And add to the destroyed scene, Walking in, to let the water dance against me, It feels good, to lose the air in my lungs, After losing the love in my heart, I suppose its time to run away, I think my hearts on empty, But i'll use the last of the love you gave me to press on, My eyes are dry now, I guess thats a sign, Its time to leave this place, farewell my love And so long. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

10-13-2006, 04:28 PM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 690	Take the **** this sucks comment down. Don't discount your own writing. __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic

10-13-2006, 07:15 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,242	Urgh, >.> fine. Anyother thoughts? __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.