Late night (Hang)

either/or · 10-26-2006, 06:36 AM

Well I wrote and I studied
Read graves across the land
I sat inside my pen
And wrote lies across my hand
But for every towering city
Theres a broken lonesome town
I’ve fallen down again
I think it’s time to stay down

I fell into a river
To see if it was true
And I sat inside a cage
Sniffing cyonide and glue
But for every proud king
There was a cracked and broken crown

I lay in the dark
To try and catch the light
But for every hundred wrongs
There never was a right
I bargained with the devil
Selling hatred by the pound

I heard too many stories
From a broken tongue
It told me it took a life
From god’s golden lung
And in his final breath
A long and lonesome sound
He said he’d fallen down once too much
And it was time to stay down

I came across the rubble
The dirt and the remains
A generation of bodies
Dragging their dead brains
A nation who’s head
Is stuck firmly in the ground

One night I stared
Into hated eyes
I shot disease into my pain
And starred at splitting skies
From every cracking cloud
Spewed rain as thick as sand
I’ve fallen down once too much
I don’t think I’ll ever stand

Swapping blood with a s snake
I gave up my brain
He whispered in my ear
That I would never be the same
And nothing that I ever built
Came out as I had planned

I know what they whisper
About all that I owe them
They saw through all the bull****
And they saw through the self loathing
For everything you drop
They will never lend a hand

I cut corners to stay awake
To not let my guard slip
If one more bright light bumps me
My brain is certain it will flip
But I dropped all my answers
through a hole in my hand

So I buried my head
Into someones heart
Shook myself and promised
To take it from the start
But for every night
When she is not around
I think that I will fall
And wait till I can stand

blackTshirt · 10-26-2006, 06:40 AM

jesus.. i like it a lot..
i've always liked your poems, they're really really good

The Dave · 10-26-2006, 07:37 AM

He said he’d falled down once too much

^Would that line not sound better if you changed falled to fallen, because he'd ends with a strong d and so does falled, makes it hard to pronounce and keep the flow.

either/or · 10-26-2006, 03:09 PM

oops, yeah thanks for that. some were fallen and some were falled. i removed a few of those ' fallen down' lines.

**sleepy jack** · 10-27-2006, 02:41 PM

I like itt, are you going to record this?

TrampInaTux · 10-28-2006, 04:21 AM

Reminds me of Cash quite a lot...

Very good

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10-26-2006, 06:36 AM
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 379	Late night Well I wrote and I studied Read graves across the land I sat inside my pen And wrote lies across my hand But for every towering city Theres a broken lonesome town I’ve fallen down again I think it’s time to stay down I fell into a river To see if it was true And I sat inside a cage Sniffing cyonide and glue But for every proud king There was a cracked and broken crown I lay in the dark To try and catch the light But for every hundred wrongs There never was a right I bargained with the devil Selling hatred by the pound I heard too many stories From a broken tongue It told me it took a life From god’s golden lung And in his final breath A long and lonesome sound He said he’d fallen down once too much And it was time to stay down I came across the rubble The dirt and the remains A generation of bodies Dragging their dead brains A nation who’s head Is stuck firmly in the ground One night I stared Into hated eyes I shot disease into my pain And starred at splitting skies From every cracking cloud Spewed rain as thick as sand I’ve fallen down once too much I don’t think I’ll ever stand Swapping blood with a s snake I gave up my brain He whispered in my ear That I would never be the same And nothing that I ever built Came out as I had planned I know what they whisper About all that I owe them They saw through all the bull**** And they saw through the self loathing For everything you drop They will never lend a hand I cut corners to stay awake To not let my guard slip If one more bright light bumps me My brain is certain it will flip But I dropped all my answers through a hole in my hand So I buried my head Into someones heart Shook myself and promised To take it from the start But for every night When she is not around I think that I will fall And wait till I can stand __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

10-26-2006, 06:40 AM
blackTshirt The Randomness Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: romania.. shut up Posts: 897	jesus.. i like it a lot.. i've always liked your poems, they're really really good __________________ My rims never spin, to the contrary You'll find that they're quite stationary.

10-26-2006, 07:37 AM
The Dave Me and The Major Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Kentucky Posts: 1,887	He said he’d falled down once too much ^Would that line not sound better if you changed falled to fallen, because he'd ends with a strong d and so does falled, makes it hard to pronounce and keep the flow. __________________ My collection,winkwinkcoughcough

10-26-2006, 03:09 PM
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 379	oops, yeah thanks for that. some were fallen and some were falled. i removed a few of those ' fallen down' lines. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

10-27-2006, 02:41 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,373	I like itt, are you going to record this? __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

10-28-2006, 04:21 AM
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,451	Reminds me of Cash quite a lot... Very good