How Many Times... (hardcore, Kiss, hardcore, song, Hang)

**sleepy jack** · 11-09-2006, 03:27 AM

*trying to stir up some activity*, I don't know how I feel about this one I wrote it in a slightleh altered state of mind but i am interested in opinions on it.

How Many Times Can A Man Start Over Before He Forgets Who He Is?

I see Charlie Brown hanging from a noose, smart crow making mischeif is going to sing me to sleep while I try and rationalize this warped mind and put my heart in its placed nailed to your frontdoor, just above the welcome mat.

Try and hide it, and make me your fall back plan, you'll rest like Garfield while I am your Odie, always being kicked to the ground well guess what? I see through your mask, and it aint the most beautiful site so stuff your face love, and get ready for a bite at the throat its time you learned how pain feels.

And like Simba, I fall from grace, and run away hiding myself but unlike him, I never return to become a king. No, a hermit I remain i'm content with Calvin, Hobbes and Jack Daniels.

The Dave · 11-09-2006, 08:12 AM

I personally don't get it. In the second paragraph you're talking like you're going to get revenge on her and in the third one you're talking about how you're the one who is falling.

**sleepy jack** · 11-10-2006, 03:14 AM

Like I said I was in a pretty hectic state of mind with 34823493 things going through my head.

This chick messed with me hardcore, and I do wanna slap her alot, and hug and kiss her and run away from her and never see her again.

Its confusing.

swim · 11-10-2006, 09:00 AM

It's nonsensical goodness.

ZeppelinAir · 11-11-2006, 02:52 AM

the hectic state of mind you mentioned is doing a pretty good job i think

Alo · 11-11-2006, 04:58 AM

^ I don't agree. The way you weaved in the characters is a bit too chaotic. It could be a lot better if it had a slight storyline. And made a bit more sense.

It's nice for a beginning though, just keep working from this base.

**sleepy jack** · 11-11-2006, 03:23 PM

I don't think i'm going to bother with this.
I hate it, though i've been feeling weird about this song two days ago I liked it.

Crowe · 11-12-2006, 10:12 AM

Good choice Crow. Sometimes songs don't need to be returned to - if you can't work with it, leave it.

~~Ekset~~ · 11-14-2006, 04:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by swimintheundertow

It's nonsensical goodness.

Agreed.

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11-09-2006, 03:27 AM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,572	How Many Times... trying to stir up some activity, I don't know how I feel about this one I wrote it in a slightleh altered state of mind but i am interested in opinions on it. How Many Times Can A Man Start Over Before He Forgets Who He Is? I see Charlie Brown hanging from a noose, smart crow making mischeif is going to sing me to sleep while I try and rationalize this warped mind and put my heart in its placed nailed to your frontdoor, just above the welcome mat. Try and hide it, and make me your fall back plan, you'll rest like Garfield while I am your Odie, always being kicked to the ground well guess what? I see through your mask, and it aint the most beautiful site so stuff your face love, and get ready for a bite at the throat its time you learned how pain feels. And like Simba, I fall from grace, and run away hiding myself but unlike him, I never return to become a king. No, a hermit I remain i'm content with Calvin, Hobbes and Jack Daniels. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

11-09-2006, 08:12 AM
The Dave Me and The Major Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Kentucky Posts: 1,886	I personally don't get it. In the second paragraph you're talking like you're going to get revenge on her and in the third one you're talking about how you're the one who is falling. __________________ My collection,winkwinkcoughcough

11-10-2006, 03:14 AM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,572	Like I said I was in a pretty hectic state of mind with 34823493 things going through my head. This chick messed with me hardcore, and I do wanna slap her alot, and hug and kiss her and run away from her and never see her again. Its confusing. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

11-10-2006, 09:00 AM
swim I'm still your f4g Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 4,525	It's nonsensical goodness. __________________ Whatever it is you think you are, you're not a good friend, unique, well read, good looking or smart. Now you know.

11-11-2006, 02:52 AM
ZeppelinAir hahahHAHAHahaha.......ha Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 544	the hectic state of mind you mentioned is doing a pretty good job i think __________________ Little Things "Sittin on a Toilet in a house i dont know, looking all around where the toilet paper go. feeling real uneasy, feeling real uncertain, got to wipe my ass again with a plastic shower curtain" Rodney Carrington-Little Things

11-11-2006, 04:58 AM
Alo Scarf Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 718	^ I don't agree. The way you weaved in the characters is a bit too chaotic. It could be a lot better if it had a slight storyline. And made a bit more sense. It's nice for a beginning though, just keep working from this base. __________________ I rocked my shoelaces untied

11-11-2006, 03:23 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,572	I don't think i'm going to bother with this. I hate it, though i've been feeling weird about this song two days ago I liked it. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

11-12-2006, 10:12 AM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 726	Good choice Crow. Sometimes songs don't need to be returned to - if you can't work with it, leave it. __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic