Songbird (member, quote)

sleepy jack · 11-27-2006, 11:08 PM

I realize I just posted a song, but I wanted 10000th post worth remembering and i'm rather proud of this poem.

Songbird

Theres a songbird that hides inside her heart,
It loves the rain, and sings in the dark.

Theres a nest inside an oak tree,
Its where the bird lives and sleeps,
It feeds on her happiness,
But its became so starved,
Theres a storm raging in her heart,
And the bird just wants to fly away,
Before the lightning finds it stay.

"I'm so good at pretending i'm happy, that sometimes I just am"
She once said to me, and the sorrow became like a dirty cage,
Her heart became just a rusted cage, and when it rains it rusts.
She could throw away that cage any day if she'd could find someone to trust,

Theres a songbird that hides inside her heart,
It loves the rain, and sings in the dark,
But it loves the sun just as much,
So let your songbird fly pretty one.

under · 11-27-2006, 11:09 PM

Really amazing poem, I love the concept

Congrats on number 10000 as well

Crowe · 11-27-2006, 11:13 PM

a nice way to start off ur 10k!

**LesPaul43** · 11-27-2006, 11:21 PM

Really good poem.
Definetly a good 10,000th post.

Crashing Sun · 12-01-2006, 09:53 AM

I Liked:
"Theres a songbird that hides inside her heart,
It loves the rain, and sings in the dark."

Though I didn't like some of the literal telling:
"It feeds on her happiness,
But its became so starved,"

Not sure how this fits in:
"Theres a happiness inside an oak box,
Its where her bird keeps its nest,
It feeds on her happiness,"...
it feeds on her happiness and yet there's happiness in the box too.

Didn't get this: "Before the lightning finds it stay."

sleepy jack · 12-02-2006, 11:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crashing Sun

I Liked:
"Theres a songbird that hides inside her heart,
It loves the rain, and sings in the dark."

Though I didn't like some of the literal telling:
"It feeds on her happiness,
But its became so starved,"

*shrugs* this was meant for a paticular person and shes been sad lately, i'm keeping that part.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crashing Sun

Not sure how this fits in:
"Theres a happiness inside an oak box,
Its where her bird keeps its nest,
It feeds on her happiness,"...
it feeds on her happiness and yet there's happiness in the box too.

Didn't notice that, its now "Theres a nest inside an oak tree"

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crashing Sun

Didn't get this: "Before the lightning finds it stay."

It goes along with the storm part, the bird wanting to get out of the storm before it gets struck by lightning.

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11-27-2006, 11:08 PM
sleepy jack dance music Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 17,759	Songbird I realize I just posted a song, but I wanted 10000th post worth remembering and i'm rather proud of this poem. Songbird Theres a songbird that hides inside her heart, It loves the rain, and sings in the dark. Theres a nest inside an oak tree, Its where the bird lives and sleeps, It feeds on her happiness, But its became so starved, Theres a storm raging in her heart, And the bird just wants to fly away, Before the lightning finds it stay. "I'm so good at pretending i'm happy, that sometimes I just am" She once said to me, and the sorrow became like a dirty cage, Her heart became just a rusted cage, and when it rains it rusts. She could throw away that cage any day if she'd could find someone to trust, Theres a songbird that hides inside her heart, It loves the rain, and sings in the dark, But it loves the sun just as much, So let your songbird fly pretty one. __________________ I dyed my hair in a motel void met the coroner at the Dreamgate Frontier, He took my hand said I'll help you boy if you really want to disappear.

11-27-2006, 11:13 PM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 727	a nice way to start off ur 10k! __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic

11-27-2006, 11:21 PM
LesPaul43 Bring da Ruckus Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: British Columbia Posts: 4,084	Really good poem. Definetly a good 10,000th post. __________________ We are entirely smooth, We admit to the truth, We are the best at what we do.

12-01-2006, 09:53 AM
Crashing Sun Idontthinkyouknow Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Out of the Frying Pan Posts: 103	I Liked: "Theres a songbird that hides inside her heart, It loves the rain, and sings in the dark." Though I didn't like some of the literal telling: "It feeds on her happiness, But its became so starved," Not sure how this fits in: "Theres a happiness inside an oak box, Its where her bird keeps its nest, It feeds on her happiness,"... it feeds on her happiness and yet there's happiness in the box too. Didn't get this: "Before the lightning finds it stay." __________________ People Against People "Scientists in Taiwan say they have bred three pigs that glow in the dark." (Support Spam)