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Old 12-02-2006, 03:09 PM  
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(verse 1)
i phoned you yesterday
your phone was off the hook.
didnt want to call again.
it just took too much work.
and i dont know if i can do this again.

i stopped by yesterday
your house was up for sale.
i stood there in the rain
you didnt get the mail
i started crying out in pain.

(bridge)
cuz if i hurt you, then theres nothing i can do about it)

(chorus)
when you want someone today
and you need someone tomorrow
i'll be there to share your pain
i'll be there to share your sorrow
just know i'm always here
and know i'm always yours

(verse2)

i know i'm not that sane
i know i'm not that fragile
but if you help me ease the pain
it wont be such a hassle
and i wont do this again

you're beautiful to me
you know just how to do it
i dont know what to say
i dont know how to prove it
i want you to know that im always yours.

(bridge)

cuz i need this more than anything you know

(chorus)(2x)

(bridge 3)

i'm yours and i dont want to lose this war.

cuz i'm yours and i just wanna know will everything turn out okay.

(chorus a few times then over)
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Old 12-02-2006, 03:13 PM  
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Originally Posted by dremecast View Post
(verse 1)
i phoned you yesterday
your phone was off the hook.
didnt want to call again.
it just took too much work.
and i dont know if i can do this again.

i stopped by yesterday
your house was up for sale.
i stood there in the rain
you didnt get the mail
i started crying out in pain.


(bridge)
cuz if i hurt you, then theres nothing i can do about it)


(chorus)
when you want someone today
and you need someone tomorrow
i'll be there to share your pain
i'll be there to share your sorrow
just know i'm always here
and know i'm always yours


(verse2)

i know i'm not that sane
i know i'm not that fragile
but if you help me ease the pain
it wont be such a hassle
and i wont do this again

you're beautiful to me
you know just how to do it
i dont know what to say
i dont know how to prove it
i want you to know that im always yours.

(bridge)

cuz i need this more than anything you know

(chorus)(2x)

(bridge 3)

i'm yours and i dont want to lose this war.

cuz i'm yours and i just wanna know will everything turn out okay.

(chorus a few times then over)



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Old 12-02-2006, 03:39 PM  
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"cuz if i hurt you, then theres nothing i can do about it"

You can be a nice guy and apologize about it, duh.

Seriously man, this girl sounds like no fun.
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Old 12-03-2006, 12:07 PM  
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I think that you should leave a beat similar to the one that is supposed to be for the song so we can understand it more.[overall it was not bad but it wasnt good] no offense
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