A Discouraging Phenomenon of Distance (fan, quote, songs, Ching)

Crowe · 12-03-2006, 08:18 PM

Normally, I am very verbose in my songs, I write a lot - I like to play with the language in large amounts. I took a more direct approach this time I've also re-instated the convention of a chorus, something I am not a huge fan of doing, and still am not sure if I am. I'm feeling creative lately. So I hope you enjoy my little experimentation. And hopefully I will be posting more. The new boom in the songwriting forum is encouraging.

A Discouraging Phenomenon of Distance

A dismal little girl
Finds asylum in a hole.
Escaping the scary,
World on the outside.
Therein she cries
For a way home.
But what hand will
reach in and save her?
And how will they,
Know the way home?

And who will come for the lost?
And who will cry for the lost??
And who will forget the lost?

A man sits gutterside,
Watching the couples
And friends walk by.
His clothes are a mess,
and he has to confess,
That he longs for,
some company during,
Those lonely nights.
But who will come for him?
And how will she,
Know the way home?

And who will come for the lost?
And who will cry for the lost??
And who will forget the lost?

Pretty flowers on her,
Dress, this young woman,
With a fake smile. She
Has forgotten the sound,
Of kindness and knows,
That a gentle touch is hard to find.
She waits, she's naive,
That stupid knight has,
Yet to arrive on golden steed.
Will he ride to find her and if so,
Will he know the way home?

And who will come for the lost?
And who will cry for the lost??
And who will forget the lost?

These are just some,
Of the thoughts and,
Faces of the lost ones,
Who are disregarded and alone,
But not so lonesome,
As the lost are surrounded by,
Others who are lost and,
Everyone is just waiting,
To be found, To be fine.
So I'll find you, if you find me.
And then if we can do it.
We'll find a way home.

And we will come for the lost.
And we will dry the tears of the lost.
We will never forget the lost.

-Ryan Crowe

oojay · 12-03-2006, 08:26 PM

good job

Raine · 12-03-2006, 08:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowe

Pretty flowers on her,
Dress, this young woman,
With a fake smile. She
Has forgotten the sound,
Of kindness and knows,
That a gentle touch is hard to find.
She waits, she's naive,
That stupid knight has,
Yet to arrive on golden steed.
Will he ride to find her and if so,
Will he know the way home?

i may have to change my sig now.

i loved it.
if we get married your vow better be half as good as this or our wedding night at happening for a lot of nights

Crowe · 12-03-2006, 08:40 PM

If my vow is better than this, our wedding night will last for 3 weeks.... without stop.

sleepy jack · 12-03-2006, 08:43 PM

Holy crap, random fact you always use to put R. Crowe for your songs, and for awhile I thought your first name was Russel.

Anyway, I like it but it isn't my favorite you've done.

oojay · 12-03-2006, 08:49 PM

its great but maybe try to put a little stronger vocabulary in the first 2 lines.

Crowe · 12-03-2006, 08:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oojay

its great but maybe try to put a little stronger vocabulary in the first 2 lines.

Good idea. Let's see how we can touch that up...

A dismal little girl
Finds asylum in a hole.
Escaping the scary,
World on the outside.
Therein she cries
For a way home.
But what hand will
reach in and save her?
And how will they,
Know the way home?

hm?

oojay · 12-03-2006, 09:04 PM

thats money right there

Raine · 12-03-2006, 09:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowe

Good idea. Let's see how we can touch that up...

A dismal little girl
Finds asylum in a hole.
Escaping the scary,
World on the outside.
Therein she cries
For a way home.
But what hand will
reach in and save her?
And how will they,
Know the way home?

hm?

wanna get married

oojay · 12-03-2006, 09:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raine

wanna get married

Raine? Speaking of getting married? I didnt realize Hell had frozen over.

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12-03-2006, 08:18 PM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 663	A Discouraging Phenomenon of Distance Normally, I am very verbose in my songs, I write a lot - I like to play with the language in large amounts. I took a more direct approach this time I've also re-instated the convention of a chorus, something I am not a huge fan of doing, and still am not sure if I am. I'm feeling creative lately. So I hope you enjoy my little experimentation. And hopefully I will be posting more. The new boom in the songwriting forum is encouraging. A Discouraging Phenomenon of Distance A dismal little girl Finds asylum in a hole. Escaping the scary, World on the outside. Therein she cries For a way home. But what hand will reach in and save her? And how will they, Know the way home? And who will come for the lost? And who will cry for the lost?? And who will forget the lost? A man sits gutterside, Watching the couples And friends walk by. His clothes are a mess, and he has to confess, That he longs for, some company during, Those lonely nights. But who will come for him? And how will she, Know the way home? And who will come for the lost? And who will cry for the lost?? And who will forget the lost? Pretty flowers on her, Dress, this young woman, With a fake smile. She Has forgotten the sound, Of kindness and knows, That a gentle touch is hard to find. She waits, she's naive, That stupid knight has, Yet to arrive on golden steed. Will he ride to find her and if so, Will he know the way home? And who will come for the lost? And who will cry for the lost?? And who will forget the lost? These are just some, Of the thoughts and, Faces of the lost ones, Who are disregarded and alone, But not so lonesome, As the lost are surrounded by, Others who are lost and, Everyone is just waiting, To be found, To be fine. So I'll find you, if you find me. And then if we can do it. We'll find a way home. And we will come for the lost. And we will dry the tears of the lost. We will never forget the lost. -Ryan Crowe __________________ Hi. I'm Crowe. This is my sig. My love finally resting, A solemn corpse buried in you. My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic Last edited by Crowe : 12-03-2006 at 09:06 PM.

12-03-2006, 08:40 PM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 663	If my vow is better than this, our wedding night will last for 3 weeks.... without stop. __________________ Hi. I'm Crowe. This is my sig. My love finally resting, A solemn corpse buried in you. My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic