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12-04-2006, 12:49 PM
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Groupie
Join Date: Nov 2006
Posts: 12
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dark room
(verse 1)
i guess that i should feel much older, than i did or was before. and i guess that i should feel much younger than i did or was before. i guess that i should feel much stronger than i did or was before. and i guess that i should feel much weaker than i was before. (chorus) and everything i left behind me (everything i left behind me) everything i left behind me is a dark room (verse 2) i don't think i should've doubted you i know i cannot live without you. you fell into a hard place now you can't get out. and i want you now. and i thought maybe we should start up again. (bridge) we should start up again(4x) (chorus) (piano solo) I thought that we made a connection but i thought there was too much affection. don't fail me now i'm cold and lonely. i'm hopeless, sad,and crying my heart out (bridge 2) i'm cold and lonely(4x) (chorus a few times then over) |
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12-04-2006, 04:46 PM
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Im Just As Sweet!!!:)
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: america
Posts: 584
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Thast cool i like it.I think you should try harder...
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12-04-2006, 04:55 PM
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Account Disabled
Join Date: Aug 2006
Posts: 44
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Your rhyming is way too forced man, a good song doesn't need to rhyme.
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12-04-2006, 09:27 PM
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Needle In The MB Haystack
Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: Missouri, USA
Posts: 1,537
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its ok......seems a bit formulaic though.
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