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Old 12-11-2006, 11:56 AM  
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Default Chamomile

(verse 1)
can you still drink me under the table?
do you still believe all of those fables?
i am running on too many cables
i can try but i dont think i'm able, oh.

i can't even remember your last name.
i am stuck in these constant freeze frames
separate my anxiety and i'm still vain
i am still here and playing the same game.

(chorus 1)
stories that would not unfold
all those lies that you were told
words that you could not define
why can't i just read your mind?

but will you remember me?
will you remember me?
will you remember me?
will you remember me, chamomile?

(verse2)
can you still pick up all the remainders?
can you still handle all of these strangers?
and just so you know, i'm letting you stay for safekeeping.
and just so you know, you screw this up again and i'm leaving.

(chorus 2)
phone calls in the afternoon
sleeping in the same bedroom
and anytime you feel alone
i hope that you call out my name.

will you remember me?
am i in your memory?
will you stay or leave?
will you remember me,chamomile?
(guitar solo)

(chorus 1 and 2 a few times then over)
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Old 12-11-2006, 02:38 PM  
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Are you serious? This is pretty laughable. The rhyming is cheesy and really bad. And there is no story is just random words to fill in the between the last words of the lines.
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Old 12-11-2006, 02:47 PM  
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To be fair, I think this is one of those that would come over better when heard.
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Old 12-12-2006, 08:58 AM  
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No music, no genre. What does the meldoy and guitar sound like. The music could help a lot, but by itself I think it's too simplistic, like pop punk with cheesy emotives.
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Old 12-14-2006, 01:25 AM  
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chamomile tea?
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Old 12-14-2006, 02:28 AM  
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I don't get it!

That is... If there is anything to get in this song.
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Old 12-14-2006, 04:52 AM  
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I don't get it!

That is... If there is anything to get in this song.
Obviously about an old love interest in tea. He has grown up and moved on to coffee.
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Old 12-15-2006, 01:23 PM  
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me and my friend have worked out this song on guitar it actually sounds good, we hope to get it recorded soon, its got a slow beat. its a strictly acoustic song..

p.s. its about a girl named chamomile by the way.
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