Poetry (dance, metal, title, talented, song)

**sleepy jack** · 01-10-2007, 08:04 PM

Ladies chill out.

**sleepy jack** · 01-10-2007, 08:04 PM

Well that was weird

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 01-10-2007, 08:54 PM

Lol. Girls, girls, you're both pretty!

gottaSCREM · 01-11-2007, 04:13 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mamagarmr

deal with it
my poetry sucks
iadmit it
why dont you?

I could tell your poetry sucks and I haven't even read any. My poetry doesn't suck I'm just getting emotion out....That's all

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 01-11-2007, 06:04 PM

That's a nice excuse. But it grows old. Real fast. You can get your emotions out without sounding like everyone else. In fact, you'll stand out more if you're poetic abilites are better. Learn the ways of the Force, Luke.

gottaSCREM · 01-11-2007, 07:12 PM

Go screw yourself

Stu · 01-11-2007, 08:53 PM

nobodies a genius here, we all accept it, doesnt mean we cant just submit stuff for fun. this isnt a critique, well i didnt intend for it to be, it was just meant to be somewhere to share poetry... that was until an arrogant fool came along.
(edit) PLEASE, can we leave the aimless spamming for other aimless threads and just leave this thread for poetrrryy?

I woke in a daze
My thoughts were aghast
With the whining of wind
With the scurry of rain
Bemused, I sat stoic
My eyes fixed ahead
Yet my head went to battle
With such petulant dread.

Darkness encased me
Chills wore me down
Entrenched bouts of terror
Pummelled my core
My heart left my side
With it went pride
For all I that I was
Ran into the night.

To what this entails
One cannot divulge
To the outdoors I glared
Past the trees to the moon
And as I sat clueless
He gave me a smile
The coldest of smiles
Cementing my gloom.

Stu · 01-11-2007, 09:10 PM

Another

Rendered immobile
Flummoxed with grief
Discordant retentions of nonchalant belief
Pious ramblings
Bludgeoned till dead
A nuance of grey coats the richest of red.
Haughty delinquents
Splattered in blame
Seeds of denial cloud the towers of shame
Banal resistance
Fades once again
Once the tumult subsides all efforts are in vain.

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 01-12-2007, 01:32 PM

I actually think of myself as a good writer. Because I've been told by other writers. And after doing it for almost ten years...plus, it's all I want to be, so, I better be good, or I'm fucked.

DracRomin · 01-12-2007, 02:06 PM

I am not the poetry type, but some of these are actually pretty good, even for me. Nice job people. Post some more.

Thread Tools
Show Printable Version Email this Page
Display Modes
Linear Mode Switch to Hybrid Mode Switch to Threaded Mode

01-10-2007, 08:04 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,381	Ladies chill out. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

01-10-2007, 08:04 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,381	Well that was weird __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

01-11-2007, 07:12 PM
gottaSCREM A Thorn For Every Heart Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: U.S.A Posts: 253	Go screw yourself

01-11-2007, 08:53 PM
Stu Music Addict Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: London, England Posts: 3,157	nobodies a genius here, we all accept it, doesnt mean we cant just submit stuff for fun. this isnt a critique, well i didnt intend for it to be, it was just meant to be somewhere to share poetry... that was until an arrogant fool came along. (edit) PLEASE, can we leave the aimless spamming for other aimless threads and just leave this thread for poetrrryy? I woke in a daze My thoughts were aghast With the whining of wind With the scurry of rain Bemused, I sat stoic My eyes fixed ahead Yet my head went to battle With such petulant dread. Darkness encased me Chills wore me down Entrenched bouts of terror Pummelled my core My heart left my side With it went pride For all I that I was Ran into the night. To what this entails One cannot divulge To the outdoors I glared Past the trees to the moon And as I sat clueless He gave me a smile The coldest of smiles Cementing my gloom.

01-11-2007, 09:10 PM
Stu Music Addict Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: London, England Posts: 3,157	Another Rendered immobile Flummoxed with grief Discordant retentions of nonchalant belief Pious ramblings Bludgeoned till dead A nuance of grey coats the richest of red. Haughty delinquents Splattered in blame Seeds of denial cloud the towers of shame Banal resistance Fades once again Once the tumult subsides all efforts are in vain.

01-12-2007, 02:06 PM
DracRomin Groupie Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Cleveland Posts: 14	I am not the poetry type, but some of these are actually pretty good, even for me. Nice job people. Post some more. __________________