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Old 01-07-2007, 10:51 PM  
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Default Glass Memories And Snowglobe Effigies

Glass Memories And Broken Effigies

A glass memory a broken effigy,
His hearts being broken but he doesn't know,
Hes smoking a cigarette all alone.

A flawed man kissing her porcelain skin,
His crude fingertips running across her perfect lips,
Shes still his queen and all this means nothing,
Shes still his queen and he means nothing.

A glass memory a broken effigy,
His hearts being crushed but he doesn't know,
Hes drinking vodka at home.

And she still his queen,
Last night it meant nothing,
But now shes so scared,
Shes starting to show,
And his love it continues to grow,
While she wears baggy shirts,
As he paints her pictures,
Just for her,
As he paints picture,
He is just a fool.

A glass memory a broken effigy,
His hearts being broken but he doesn't know,
Hes smoking a cigarette all alone,
Hes drinking vodka at home,
A glass memory,
A broken effigy,
His hearts being crushed
And oh, now he knows.
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Old 01-09-2007, 12:08 PM  
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I really like this. The imagery was really good. Everything flowed perfect. Nice job!

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Old 01-09-2007, 03:14 PM  
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Is the apostrophe key broken on your keyboard or something?

A glass memory, a snowglobe effigy,
His hearts been broken but he doesn't know.
Hes smoking a cigarette all alone.
Hes drinking vodka at home.
A glass memory.
A Snowglobe effigy.
His hearts being broken
And oh, now he knows.
^ In the beginning you say "his hearts been broken" Then it goes back to being in the process of breaking. Switch the lines.
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