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Old 02-07-2007, 02:43 AM  
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another poem i recently was working on, suggestions would be greatlyy valued

Right Side Creation

Sleep such a deep sleep and
Fall into the arms of angels and drift away in their soothing melody
Carry me to a valley far away from the plain of life
Between mental and physical is where it lies
The right will guide you there before the waking hours
My wish is for the sun never to rise and just let my soul continue to drift
To float in this lake of dreams and prayers of the fallen
The love and hate from the lost fly into the sky as a fine mist
And fall upon me as a light drizzle that allows me to feel
Everything that I have ever wanted to know
Let this passion cast away as a billion fire flies
To have these angels of the night illuminate the dark fields
Fields of black roses and the crying willow trees
To find my way back home, just let the
Fire flies majestic glow guide me to my withered mortal body
Only to return again another day
To return when the black winged angel guides me to my after life home
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You've gotta learn some new words like for serious.
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Old 02-07-2007, 07:51 PM  
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i agree, its too simplistic
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too simple, will work on that
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