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Old 02-16-2007, 02:42 AM  
ZeppelinAir
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i am stuck in a rut of no thoughts and cant escape, some feed back on this to help me get out,

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Sing me your song and I’ll sing you mine,
Insult me now and I will laugh and you will cry,
Gleaming smile poisons my thoughts,
Making me fuck up as I always do,
Paralyzed by radiant eyes I have no control

Time withers and so do we,
Split apart by an axe in our lives,
We splinter and stab into the closest human
But always hoping to find our way back,
Find away to kill father time and repeat those joyous days,

What happened to you we never talk anymore
Divided we all fall with no shoulder to lean on
Those whiskey eyes have seen much trouble
I wish it would have ended there,
Death is eternal and forever is never
Life is forever…..
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Old 02-22-2007, 09:41 PM  
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Insult me now and I will laugh and you will cry,
"Insult me now and i'll laugh, you'll cry." or something like that so it doesn't drag on for so long.

I don't really care for this, for one it seems to be three separate poems and its just not that interesting.
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Old 02-23-2007, 03:02 AM  
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like i said i been having trouble writing anything, my mind draws blank and cant think of shit
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Old 02-24-2007, 11:36 AM  
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Its iffy so yah iffy
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