The Mourning Dove Gets Caught In The Killing Wires (member, show)

**sleepy jack** · 02-16-2007, 01:18 PM

The Mourning Dove Gets Caught In The Killing Wires

The winds rush through us all, to chill us to the bone,
And show us how long its been since we came home,
Where the sun bleeds across the land to reveal
Frost all over the ground, the streets like porcelain,
And we burn away these days on the calendar,
To pretend time will never pass, but the ashes remain,
Forever being stirred by the wind with each insignificant breeze.

So when you left south with a feather in place of goodbye,
I don't think anyone really cried, it was only a shock to the blind,
The winter skies and ever pulling tides don't leave in their prime,
But they do keep returning with time.

So all the joy that you once found in the seconds of life,
Were left to dry and the fountain eventually cracked,
Growing sick from the inside till it died, like a cold winter sky,
So from dove to blackbird, beauty to death,
You left the world before your final breath.

Spring came earlier then anyone could have thought,
And these seasons of neglect have taken their toll,
Near the base of a burning evergreen under the sun,
Everyone recited their memories, sent their prayers
Like doves into the air.

**sleepy jack** · 02-17-2007, 03:12 PM

bumpp

Loser · 02-17-2007, 04:30 PM

Ethan if you were a women I would hump you for makeing this. It is good

...........Alittle too good *gets suspicious*

ItsRed · 02-17-2007, 05:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

The Mourning Dove Gets Caught In The Killing Wires

So when you left south with a feather in place of goodbye,
I don't think anyone really cried, it was only a shock to the blind,

Usually your stuff is a little uh.. organic (?) for my taste, I couldn't stand the early Romantic era poets either. Not that it's not good writing, just not my taste. I remember hearing a prof blather on about Kubla Khan for way too long and elevate Cooleridges' symbolism of the 'natural' world.

But the quoted lines are great, by far my favorite of yours. Have you read T.S. Eliot?? (this is the way the world ends, not with a bang, but a whimper) he has similar descriptive qualities, but much more urban. I think he could really inspire you.

**sleepy jack** · 02-17-2007, 05:57 PM

I havn't, i'll check him outt.

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 02-17-2007, 07:52 PM

T.S. Eliot. Yummy.

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02-16-2007, 01:18 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,552	The Mourning Dove Gets Caught In The Killing Wires The Mourning Dove Gets Caught In The Killing Wires The winds rush through us all, to chill us to the bone, And show us how long its been since we came home, Where the sun bleeds across the land to reveal Frost all over the ground, the streets like porcelain, And we burn away these days on the calendar, To pretend time will never pass, but the ashes remain, Forever being stirred by the wind with each insignificant breeze. So when you left south with a feather in place of goodbye, I don't think anyone really cried, it was only a shock to the blind, The winter skies and ever pulling tides don't leave in their prime, But they do keep returning with time. So all the joy that you once found in the seconds of life, Were left to dry and the fountain eventually cracked, Growing sick from the inside till it died, like a cold winter sky, So from dove to blackbird, beauty to death, You left the world before your final breath. Spring came earlier then anyone could have thought, And these seasons of neglect have taken their toll, Near the base of a burning evergreen under the sun, Everyone recited their memories, sent their prayers Like doves into the air. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

02-17-2007, 03:12 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,552	bumpp __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

02-17-2007, 04:30 PM
Loser The Professor Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York City Posts: 1,138	Ethan if you were a women I would hump you for makeing this. It is good ...........Alittle too good gets suspicious __________________ "It's just so fuckin' weird. You write about this shit, and you're suddenly the spokesman for a fuckin' generation,...... Any generation that would pick Kurt or me as its spokesman -- that must be a pretty fucked up generation, don't you think?"

02-17-2007, 05:57 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,552	I havn't, i'll check him outt. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.