rest in peace, you’re done (single, quote)

Alo · 03-08-2007, 02:45 PM

A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him:

I cry for you bravery
Your sadness, your despair
For how you saw no other way
Because your life was so unfair

I imagine you standing at he edge
Clasping the rail tight
Then slowly loosening your grip
Stuck in a moral fight

Then letting go
The jump
The fall
The single thought
‘I’m done’

It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done.

ZeppelinAir · 03-09-2007, 03:38 AM

you miss spelled the^^^

its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though

sleepy jack · 03-09-2007, 03:42 AM

I like the simpleness, but then again it also seems like it could be a good deal more. I can't explain it.

Alo · 03-09-2007, 05:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ZeppelinAir

you miss spelled the^^^

its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though

Where? If you mean then, it wasn't misspelled, I meant then.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

I like the simpleness, but then again it also seems like it could be a good deal more. I can't explain it.

I wish it were more, I feel so much more around this all. I just can't seem to put it into words. It just hurts, that he hated himself and his life so much. He was a great guy.

ZeppelinAir · 03-09-2007, 08:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alo

A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him:

I cry for you bravery
Your sadness, your despair
For how you saw no other way
Because your life was so unfair

I imagine you standing at he edge
Clasping the rail tight
Then slowly loosening your grip
Stuck in a moral fight

Then letting go
The jump
The fall
The single thought
‘I’m done’

It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done.

right there, should have pointed it out better

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03-08-2007, 02:45 PM
Alo Scarf Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 718	rest in peace, you’re done A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him: I cry for you bravery Your sadness, your despair For how you saw no other way Because your life was so unfair I imagine you standing at he edge Clasping the rail tight Then slowly loosening your grip Stuck in a moral fight Then letting go The jump The fall The single thought ‘I’m done’ It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done. __________________ I rocked my shoelaces untied

03-09-2007, 03:38 AM
ZeppelinAir hahahHAHAHahaha.......ha Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 545	you miss spelled the^^^ its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though __________________ Little Things "Sittin on a Toilet in a house i dont know, looking all around where the toilet paper go. feeling real uneasy, feeling real uncertain, got to wipe my ass again with a plastic shower curtain" Rodney Carrington-Little Things

03-09-2007, 03:42 AM
sleepy jack dance music Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 17,772	I like the simpleness, but then again it also seems like it could be a good deal more. I can't explain it. __________________ I dyed my hair in a motel void met the coroner at the Dreamgate Frontier, He took my hand said I'll help you boy if you really want to disappear.