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**sleepy jack** · 03-09-2007, 03:49 AM

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So you listen to the echo of her voice floating down the hall,
And smile because shes become the substitute for your needs,
You spent months quitely burning in that hell you created,
But you found yourself with a longing you couldn't explain,
So like a bird she came flying on that northern wind,
To pull you up and take you away.

And you hope she isn't like those other birds,
That pick you up to let you fall,
'Cause thats all you've ever known,
But you never learn from your mistakes,
So you risk everything and let her take you away.

But so far shes never let go and through it all,
You've found out that theres more then being between the bars,
So you listen to her sing and hope she'll stay,
And won't fly south when she finds a new wind,
Because you can't survive if she goes away,
So you listen to her to sing and try and forget the end,
And say you'll love her even if its just for a day.

Trauma · 03-09-2007, 12:36 PM

I liked this, it was pretty simple and uplifting.

enemyat_thesix · 03-09-2007, 12:42 PM

I'm gonna be honest: I just looked at the comic.

And it's hilarious.

Trauma · 03-09-2007, 02:54 PM

ZeppelinAir · 03-10-2007, 12:03 AM

again with the birds........

anyway its not as good as lot of your others, the lines i didnt like where

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And you hope she isn't like those other birds,
That pick you up to let you fall,
'Cause thats all you've ever known,

they are just to blah.....

**sleepy jack** · 03-10-2007, 12:21 AM

I think I may just cut that whole versee.

And about the birds, i'm just a sucker for repeating metaphors <.<

ZeppelinAir · 03-10-2007, 12:31 AM

yeah who aint though really

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03-09-2007, 03:49 AM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,373	. "" So you listen to the echo of her voice floating down the hall, And smile because shes become the substitute for your needs, You spent months quitely burning in that hell you created, But you found yourself with a longing you couldn't explain, So like a bird she came flying on that northern wind, To pull you up and take you away. And you hope she isn't like those other birds, That pick you up to let you fall, 'Cause thats all you've ever known, But you never learn from your mistakes, So you risk everything and let her take you away. But so far shes never let go and through it all, You've found out that theres more then being between the bars, So you listen to her sing and hope she'll stay, And won't fly south when she finds a new wind, Because you can't survive if she goes away, So you listen to her to sing and try and forget the end, And say you'll love her even if its just for a day. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

03-10-2007, 12:21 AM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,373	I think I may just cut that whole versee. And about the birds, i'm just a sucker for repeating metaphors <.< __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

03-10-2007, 12:31 AM
ZeppelinAir hahahHAHAHahaha.......ha Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 544	yeah who aint though really __________________ Little Things "Sittin on a Toilet in a house i dont know, looking all around where the toilet paper go. feeling real uneasy, feeling real uncertain, got to wipe my ass again with a plastic shower curtain" Rodney Carrington-Little Things