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03-14-2007, 03:38 PM
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They call me Tundra Boy
Join Date: Sep 2005
Location: In your linen cupboard.
Posts: 1,208
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Vito's Lament
A past, a future
When I came to this country I had none For each of my crimes I will suffer a thousand damnations But I had no choice My children, I implore you Do not copy me My children, I implore you Do not copy me Don't follow me down, don't follow me down I would not choose this life for you Don't follow me down, don't follow me down I would not choose this life for you These fine clothes tell nothing of The guilt, the anguish, the shame Every gain has come with equal loss Every joy with equal with pain My children, I implore you Do not copy me My children, I implore you Do not copy me Don't follow me down, don't follow me down I would not choose this life for you Don't follow me down, don't follow me down I would not choose this life for you There might be some grammatical mistakes in this lyric, I really don't know, if there are then please point them out.
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03-14-2007, 04:00 PM
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hahahHAHAHahaha.......ha
Join Date: Jun 2006
Location: somewhere in Michigan
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its alright i didnt really get into it. it just just really dont do much for me and i didnt see any grammer errors, of course my grammer sucks anyway
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03-14-2007, 05:13 PM
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Join Date: Feb 2007
Location: Joplin, MO
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There definitely aren't any grammatical errors. What, are you taking it to a publisher, or something?
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03-14-2007, 05:41 PM
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Im Just As Sweet!!!:)
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: america
Posts: 584
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I like it but you should change some spots just not sure which ones yet
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03-15-2007, 12:58 AM
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Join Date: Oct 2006
Location: Boston
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I can definitely see it as a folk-punk song, Ghost Mice style.
And grammatically it's A-OK.
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