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03-17-2007, 08:51 PM
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Wrote this two years ago for a band i was in...
My Affair.
Verse 1: G… Wine gently runs through the branches Bb… through the ages through us it passes C… And slowly takes us through the passage G… Counting days until we’re free G… Distorted visions they now seem to me Bb… As common as once was reality C… More a lifestyle than a necessity G… brief moments of clarity in the… Chorus: G… …Ashes Bb… For as long as I had C… Hoped for… D… Escaped enough to find the G… Misery… Bb… The misery that I had C… Longed for… That I had G… Longed for Verse 2: G… Been a long time since I could find myself Bb… Bought my freedom from the shelf C… And it doesn’t take much to lose yourself G… Can’t seem to fall from the stairway G… I dream but I just don’t feel Bb… Like I’m resting now its future-real C… This love affair with endorphin meals G… Brief moments of clarity in the… Chorus: G… …Ashes Bb… For as long as I had C… Hoped for… D… Escaped enough to find the G… Misery… Bb… The misery that I had C… Longed for… That I had G… Longed for
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03-17-2007, 09:21 PM
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I don't like the rhyming of passes/passages because they sound too similar. Other then that its solid.
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03-17-2007, 09:30 PM
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I'll get the misses to sing it on recording soon mate so you can hear how it sounds...thanks for commenting by the way, i dont write much so when i do i like atleast a little feedback.
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03-17-2007, 10:41 PM
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O.O I think it's a bit too rythms don't you think??? ^^! despite of that I can see what is the tune going to be for this one. lol
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03-18-2007, 05:16 AM
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It's not too difficult to establish really is it...
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03-22-2007, 08:39 PM
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I agree so, your style are more to establish sceneries but there some emotions in there?? by the way I was able to find least 3 people to would want to play rock music with me but it's just leave the drummer. but my best friend going to try to gring one of his friend who play drum crazy to join, I thank the god! T-T
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03-22-2007, 08:53 PM
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the constant rhyming is distracting, and detracts from the lyrics.
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03-22-2007, 09:16 PM
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there shouldn't be alot of rythms though, probably distort the tune then
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03-22-2007, 09:18 PM
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the chords sound weird on my out of tune guitar
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03-25-2007, 10:48 AM
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haha, tune it? and your actually trying it? do you want me to record it so you can hear how it sounds?
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