Same Old Beats, Old Slum Streets (lyric, cover, show, guitar)

Jadix · 03-22-2007, 11:53 AM

This is pretty good, i liked it.

The first two lines have a seemingly forced rhyme.

My steps, as I watch the clouds slowly surround the sun
And bring it down, to prove the brightest stars eventually burn out.

^ awesome.

I like your chorus.

third stanza is great too. I like the dry ink thing.

littleknowitall · 03-25-2007, 10:59 AM

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Originally Posted by Crowquill

Elliott Smith or Bright Eyes (Lua, Poison Oak, etc.) style

<33333333333333333333jake.

I'll upload some songs later to give you an idea.

sounds good, ill even record it so you can hear it, but this is all dependent on what time my bro gets back and kicks me out of his room.

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03-22-2007, 11:53 AM
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 140	This is pretty good, i liked it. The first two lines have a seemingly forced rhyme. My steps, as I watch the clouds slowly surround the sun And bring it down, to prove the brightest stars eventually burn out. ^ awesome. I like your chorus. third stanza is great too. I like the dry ink thing.