Honestly (member, song, Gender)

andykoivisto · 05-04-2007, 06:22 PM

Do you remember our relationship
the days we spent together
honestly, i dont
i forgot about it

sorry

Ace · 05-06-2007, 06:04 PM

.......if you were typing that into someone's email, you kinda ****ed up buddy.
Wrong window.

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 05-07-2007, 01:36 AM

Lmao.

**right-track** · 05-07-2007, 05:34 AM

It's brilliant, bordering on genius!

It conjures up a failed relationship and hints at the bitterness of the author.
It's clear the writer has been wronged by the individual this was aimed at and it's intentional vagueness of gender is a masterstroke, rendering the piece truly universal.

"Do you remember our relationship,
the days we spent together"

There's the leading question, it's purpose is clear.
The intent to lull the recipient into a false sense of nostalgia and of a love that was.

Then the sting and with it, all that a love spurned represents.

"honestly,
I don't.
I forgot about it".

It reeks of bitterness and betrayal, it's designed to cut deep, as deep as the wounds the subject matter inflicted on the writer.
Revenge!

"sorry"

A nod of recognition for the pain re-paid.

The minimalism of this work is a trick of the eye.
And on closer examination, each word is a brushstroke.
It's been said, "a picture paints a thousand words"...here, the opposite applies.

Actually...on second thoughts...it was shite!

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 05-07-2007, 09:14 AM

LOLZ, R-T. I love your humor.

andykoivisto · 05-07-2007, 05:23 PM

This wasnt an email, it was my attempt at song writing.

Personally I thought it was perfect, r-t summed it up, all the emotion and heartbreak that when into writing this.

either/or · 05-10-2007, 03:02 AM

you having a laugh? it sounded like one side of a boring conversation by two virgin lovers

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05-04-2007, 06:22 PM
andykoivisto Groupie Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 28	Honestly Do you remember our relationship the days we spent together honestly, i dont i forgot about it sorry

05-06-2007, 06:04 PM
Ace Negative Creep Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Georgia Posts: 648	.......if you were typing that into someone's email, you kinda **ed up buddy. Wrong window. __________________ She said if time was in a bottle High up on her shelf She would knock it over And make the world stand still If faith was in her left hand And love was in her right She'd put them both together And raise them to the sky http://myspace.com/euphoric_resolve**

05-07-2007, 05:34 AM
right-track Avin' It! Join Date: May 2005 Location: THE PEOPLES ЯEPUBLIK ФF MAИCUИIA Posts: 5,725	It's brilliant, bordering on genius! It conjures up a failed relationship and hints at the bitterness of the author. It's clear the writer has been wronged by the individual this was aimed at and it's intentional vagueness of gender is a masterstroke, rendering the piece truly universal. "Do you remember our relationship, the days we spent together" There's the leading question, it's purpose is clear. The intent to lull the recipient into a false sense of nostalgia and of a love that was. Then the sting and with it, all that a love spurned represents. "honestly, I don't. I forgot about it". It reeks of bitterness and betrayal, it's designed to cut deep, as deep as the wounds the subject matter inflicted on the writer. Revenge! "sorry" A nod of recognition for the pain re-paid. The minimalism of this work is a trick of the eye. And on closer examination, each word is a brushstroke. It's been said, "a picture paints a thousand words"...here, the opposite applies. Actually...on second thoughts...it was shite! __________________ UNITED > KIDS > WIFE

05-07-2007, 05:23 PM
andykoivisto Groupie Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 28	This wasnt an email, it was my attempt at song writing. Personally I thought it was perfect, r-t summed it up, all the emotion and heartbreak that when into writing this.

05-10-2007, 03:02 AM
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 379	you having a laugh? it sounded like one side of a boring conversation by two virgin lovers __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation