The Actor Is Hung By His Character. (dance, effect, songs)

sleepy jack · 05-29-2007, 11:40 PM

The Actor Is Hung By His Character.
5/29/07.

So I wander these streets like a ghost and prepare for another
Sleepless night, as the broken water falls in pieces from the sky,
And I hear the dark on the wind as a song floats through the trees
Words read from glass paper so fragile, and carefully crafted
And read with a practice that always reminds me of wedding vows,
Recited too often, too overdone it takes the beauty from the words,
As their tongues dance around every syllable with the practice of
Prostitute slipping into a strangers sheets to fabricate love and
Leave him to just his dreams.

These things said, they seem to cradle me, words whispered so gently,
'the only one for me' but its not the sound that captures my heart no,
Its the meaning behind the assembled letters that holds me in a way,
That seems to suspend me in a place of a bliss not even god could scheme
Up, so maybe you should think more of the connotative effect on me,
Instead of how good this will look to the surrounding beauty.

And these clothes cling to me as words form in my mind and I begin to
Shiver with a belief that i'll die here, in this airy cage and when i'm laid
Down in my grave, I hope its made of silent prose, for I hold you with
My words, as I lie like a poem.

berv · 05-29-2007, 11:55 PM

did you write this?

sleepy jack · 05-30-2007, 12:20 AM

No of course not, I posted someone else's song.

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 05-30-2007, 04:48 AM

Crowe · 05-30-2007, 11:17 AM

stop stealing my songs you bastard!

sleepy jack · 05-30-2007, 04:00 PM

srry man, I just hope you'll scroll through and only see the crow part on who posted it.

sleepy jack · 05-30-2007, 06:40 PM

I demand someone give me their thoughts on this song.

dirt mcgirt · 06-04-2007, 12:07 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

I demand someone give me their thoughts on this song.

ayo, i thnk it be betta if that actor was hung like a horse. then he could score some pussy an you could write some hardco lyrics bout it. naamean?

MURDER JUNKIE · 06-04-2007, 09:01 AM

^ I'm with dirt

The Dave · 06-04-2007, 04:15 PM

Sleepless night, as the broken water falls in pieces from the sky,

Broken water makes me think of a mother giving birth, perhaps just go with Rain or just something else? And take out "just" on the last line of the first stanza.

Other than that, I'm not sure what else to say, it almost didn't seem like something you would write which may or may not be good, I just didn't like this as much. It seems less personal.

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05-29-2007, 11:40 PM
sleepy jack dance music Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 17,772	The Actor Is Hung By His Character. The Actor Is Hung By His Character. 5/29/07. So I wander these streets like a ghost and prepare for another Sleepless night, as the broken water falls in pieces from the sky, And I hear the dark on the wind as a song floats through the trees Words read from glass paper so fragile, and carefully crafted And read with a practice that always reminds me of wedding vows, Recited too often, too overdone it takes the beauty from the words, As their tongues dance around every syllable with the practice of Prostitute slipping into a strangers sheets to fabricate love and Leave him to just his dreams. These things said, they seem to cradle me, words whispered so gently, 'the only one for me' but its not the sound that captures my heart no, Its the meaning behind the assembled letters that holds me in a way, That seems to suspend me in a place of a bliss not even god could scheme Up, so maybe you should think more of the connotative effect on me, Instead of how good this will look to the surrounding beauty. And these clothes cling to me as words form in my mind and I begin to Shiver with a belief that i'll die here, in this airy cage and when i'm laid Down in my grave, I hope its made of silent prose, for I hold you with My words, as I lie like a poem. __________________ I dyed my hair in a motel void met the coroner at the Dreamgate Frontier, He took my hand said I'll help you boy if you really want to disappear.

05-29-2007, 11:55 PM
berv Music Addict Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 43	did you write this? __________________ If you could only see the pain that hides behind these eyes.

05-30-2007, 12:20 AM
sleepy jack dance music Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 17,772	No of course not, I posted someone else's song. __________________ I dyed my hair in a motel void met the coroner at the Dreamgate Frontier, He took my hand said I'll help you boy if you really want to disappear.

05-30-2007, 11:17 AM
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Chicago/St. Louie Posts: 727	stop stealing my songs you bastard! __________________ My silly experimental band: www.myspace.com/boyfromthestarsmusic

05-30-2007, 04:00 PM
sleepy jack dance music Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 17,772	srry man, I just hope you'll scroll through and only see the crow part on who posted it. __________________ I dyed my hair in a motel void met the coroner at the Dreamgate Frontier, He took my hand said I'll help you boy if you really want to disappear.

05-30-2007, 06:40 PM
sleepy jack dance music Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 17,772	I demand someone give me their thoughts on this song. __________________ I dyed my hair in a motel void met the coroner at the Dreamgate Frontier, He took my hand said I'll help you boy if you really want to disappear.

06-04-2007, 09:01 AM
MURDER JUNKIE Tiggers Like To BOUNCE!! Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: SH1TTY London Ontario Canada Posts: 2,437	^ I'm with dirt __________________ MINIMUM WAGE IS A GATEWAY DRUG

06-04-2007, 04:15 PM
The Dave Me and The Major Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Kentucky Posts: 1,896	Sleepless night, as the broken water falls in pieces from the sky, Broken water makes me think of a mother giving birth, perhaps just go with Rain or just something else? And take out "just" on the last line of the first stanza. Other than that, I'm not sure what else to say, it almost didn't seem like something you would write which may or may not be good, I just didn't like this as much. It seems less personal. __________________ My collection,winkwinkcoughcough