Mainly posting this because my notebooks are full and it needs to be saved. (house, favorite band)

Larkrise · 07-28-2007, 08:35 AM

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Originally Posted by Crowquill

Mainly posting this because my notebooks are full and it needs to be saved.

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Originally Posted by Crowquill

I don't really like posting songs anymore so if its a bit to personal then don't say a word.

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Originally Posted by Crowquill

this is kind of going to be my poetry thread while im gone, since i have no more notebooks and won't for who knows how long

Why don't you start a Live Journal? That way you can control who reads your stuff when it's personal.

Bane of your existence · 07-28-2007, 09:23 AM

He's emo enough without a live journal.

Ornette · 07-29-2007, 09:35 PM

I know these aren't supposed to be for us to read or critique or whatever but I'm going to anyway. I like the way you write and your style, it just sort of flows as though you were talking to someone in a long phone message or something, or the way some Bright Eyes albums begin with Oberst just telling a story. Your subject matter is really cliche, though, and I know it's personal and personal things have been done time and time again and it's difficult to do them without being slightly cliche, but I think you're a good enough writer to do it. Just my two cents.

sleepy jack · 07-29-2007, 09:40 PM

They're open for reviews/critiquing I just didn't specify because I never get any replies anymore. Most of these are that way since I was missing my girlfriend to death when I wrote all these and I was just in that state of mind, but i'll keep it in mind for later pieces. Thank you for the reply.

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07-28-2007, 09:23 AM
Bane of your existence Bang-utot Join Date: May 2007 Location: Jersey Posts: 403	He's emo enough without a live journal.

07-29-2007, 09:35 PM
Ornette Music Addict Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Ohio Posts: 113	I know these aren't supposed to be for us to read or critique or whatever but I'm going to anyway. I like the way you write and your style, it just sort of flows as though you were talking to someone in a long phone message or something, or the way some Bright Eyes albums begin with Oberst just telling a story. Your subject matter is really cliche, though, and I know it's personal and personal things have been done time and time again and it's difficult to do them without being slightly cliche, but I think you're a good enough writer to do it. Just my two cents.

07-29-2007, 09:40 PM
sleepy jack dance music Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 17,784	They're open for reviews/critiquing I just didn't specify because I never get any replies anymore. Most of these are that way since I was missing my girlfriend to death when I wrote all these and I was just in that state of mind, but i'll keep it in mind for later pieces. Thank you for the reply. __________________ I dyed my hair in a motel void met the coroner at the Dreamgate Frontier, He took my hand said I'll help you boy if you really want to disappear.