bad poetry oh noetry. (Kiss, quote, songs, hands)

**sleepy jack** · 11-01-2007, 05:05 PM

We lay warm in a circle that keeps our worlds apart
And the songbirds broke their wings when they laid in someone else's nest
When he kissed their beaks, they broke open to never sing again,
Can't seem to open up, can't seem to speak, hands waving
A goodbye, a drowning fear of water i'm asking for your help
Because all these lines will only last a second then the smoke will clear
And you'll see me for what I am, a silly boy in a silly coffin
Sitting in silence, with my hands folded neatly in my lap
The velvet pillow pulled back, your eyes like the sun are making me blush,
But I just wanted to watch the sunrise when you woke up,
And these sleepless walls seem to be singing old songs,
Obla-Di Obla-Da life goes on.

~~N*S*G~~ · 11-04-2007, 08:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

We lay warm in a circle that keeps our worlds apart
And the songbirds broke their wings when they laid in someone else's nest
When he kissed their beaks, they broke open to never sing again,
Can't seem to open up, can't seem to speak, hands waving
A goodbye, a drowning fear of water i'm asking for your help
Because all these lines will only last a second then the smoke will clear
And you'll see me for what I am, a silly boy in a silly coffin
Sitting in silence, with my hands folded neatly in my lap
The velvet pillow pulled back, your eyes like the sun are making me blush,
But I just wanted to watch the sunrise when you woke up,
And these sleepless walls seem to be singing old songs,
Obla-Di Obla-Da life goes on.

Is this spaced correctly?

**sleepy jack** · 11-04-2007, 08:56 PM

I highly doubt it.

DontRunMeOver · 11-05-2007, 07:49 AM

What is it with you and those f***ng songbirds???

Its good, although the image of somebody kissing a bird's bead made me laugh.

**sleepy jack** · 11-05-2007, 03:19 PM

A songbird broke my heart one fine day when it gave me LSD and tried to peck me to death.

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11-01-2007, 05:05 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,584	bad poetry oh noetry. We lay warm in a circle that keeps our worlds apart And the songbirds broke their wings when they laid in someone else's nest When he kissed their beaks, they broke open to never sing again, Can't seem to open up, can't seem to speak, hands waving A goodbye, a drowning fear of water i'm asking for your help Because all these lines will only last a second then the smoke will clear And you'll see me for what I am, a silly boy in a silly coffin Sitting in silence, with my hands folded neatly in my lap The velvet pillow pulled back, your eyes like the sun are making me blush, But I just wanted to watch the sunrise when you woke up, And these sleepless walls seem to be singing old songs, Obla-Di Obla-Da life goes on. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

11-04-2007, 08:56 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,584	I highly doubt it. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.

11-05-2007, 03:19 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,584	A songbird broke my heart one fine day when it gave me LSD and tried to peck me to death. __________________ I'm not blind, I believe in you.