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Old 12-05-2007, 09:02 PM  
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Default One Last Bitter Song

You say you're sick of these tiring nights
Looking through tired eyes,
And your tiring thoughts of wanting to die.
So you reflect upon days gone by,
Walking through these streets at night,
The radio is playing old love songs from the sixties
As a cigarette steadily burns between your lips,
Let me ask you:
How many years did you steal from forever?
But you're a man now
So get drunk and don't worry,
Just think about life and love
Laughing in the face of god,
Cause kid, you're a lousy boyfriend,
To a girl who just isn't into men.

You spend your days missing your mom and father,
Who told you fairytales of living water,
And you want your old friends back,
But you can't even remember their middle names,
So you drink that sentiment away,
Cheers to the sky and let this bottle drown me dry.
You check your eyes before leaving the house
And tell your friends they can't help,
There's nothing you need,
You can steal it from the lost and found,
They say love isn't something you just find in a box,
You say it's not what i'm looking for,
I'm just desperate to be self-involved,
You see poisons are shameful,
But they're better than drowning in your words,
And you hope all your lovers can forgive you about last night,
When you you were too far gone to make sense,
Don't call me an angel because i'll fall asleep next to you,
I'm just trying to sleep you off,
Because otherwise i'll be spitting up roses
And poems and chocolates and cheering for the losing team.

But this new girl, she doesn't know about the poets,
So you just talk shit but you need a lover who knows
What its like to be alone, self-inflicted staying at home,
You're a hermit kid, just fucking die,
Maybe then you can sleep in,
All day and night,
Dreaming of feathers and wings,
Demons and evil things,
Or probably nothing.
It has to be better than human beings,
They say thats pessimism but I think it's just being smart,
Looking through a clear window and all that,
The sixties are long gone and love stories are over.
But if you love me i'll love you back,
And maybe we can figure this shit out,
Even if it drives us insane,
Cause at least it'll be you and me,
Taking a new step in an old history.
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Old 12-05-2007, 10:02 PM  
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You say you're sick of these tiring nights

You spend your days missing your mom and father,

for some reason i can see myself in this song( i know its not even close to related)

great job!
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Old 12-06-2007, 05:06 AM  
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Overall, I thought it was good.
The second part was brilliant.
I would definately redo the last section though.
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Old 12-06-2007, 10:31 PM  
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Haha thats one long frikin song... its insanely awesome stuff tho
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Old 12-07-2007, 12:58 AM  
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nyce song crowquill... as alwaiz
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Old 12-07-2007, 10:41 AM  
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Learn to spell before you comment my songs, that was horrible. It's NICE with an I and always has no Z or I in it, god. Do you enjoy looking like an idiot?
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Old 12-07-2007, 11:34 AM  
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"Cause kid, you're a lousy boyfriend,
To a girl who just isn't into men."

Haha i loved that, You have a cool style and a good sense of humour. Its easy to see the influence of Morrissey in your writing.
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