Someday the Sun Will Shine (Kiss, quote, 1982, hands)

**sleepy jack** · 12-13-2007, 03:36 PM

All the people I use to know they're ghosts to me now
Tripping over their sheets and wandering through the bedroom
Shouting boo at the nearest breathing thing,
But I try and tell myself that you haven't changed,
You're the same blue-eyed love I've always known
But here you stand looking into my eyes,
No longer so innocent, not longer so sweet,
But I love you more than ever,
And consistency and you at sixteen is something I've always wanted
But people change, you can't stop it,
Try holding down the moon for a day you'll burn your hands,
Realizations strike me like the tick of a clock,
Some cars they reach their homes but others end up buried in the snow,
Or sitting on the edge of a cliff wondering if life can really end so quick,
So I'll keep that in mind and I won't spend my life waiting
It's time to leave and though my heart may try and stop me
The silly way you kiss and the way you never look at me anymore
Will encourage me to escape this world I've built around your october eyes
And look for a better life where I can count my days on the wings of butterflies.

Ace · 12-14-2007, 05:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

Try holding down the moon for a day you'll burn your hands,

Liked it all, cept for that line.
Perhaps sun would fit better?

7/10

Dizzys in the wolf · 12-14-2007, 01:30 PM

"The silly way you kiss and the way you never look at me anymore" I loved that line, and I liked the line about the moon too. You kinda have a line of confusion running through it and you keep it going well right up to the end.

The only problem I have with it is "October eyes" it feels like you kinda over loaded that line somewhere along the way. Nice work.

ZeppelinAir · 12-18-2007, 02:34 PM

Shouting Boo? thats really the only thing i had a problem with

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12-13-2007, 03:36 PM
sleepy jack Bone Machine Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Jesusland Posts: 17,327	Someday the Sun Will Shine All the people I use to know they're ghosts to me now Tripping over their sheets and wandering through the bedroom Shouting boo at the nearest breathing thing, But I try and tell myself that you haven't changed, You're the same blue-eyed love I've always known But here you stand looking into my eyes, No longer so innocent, not longer so sweet, But I love you more than ever, And consistency and you at sixteen is something I've always wanted But people change, you can't stop it, Try holding down the moon for a day you'll burn your hands, Realizations strike me like the tick of a clock, Some cars they reach their homes but others end up buried in the snow, Or sitting on the edge of a cliff wondering if life can really end so quick, So I'll keep that in mind and I won't spend my life waiting It's time to leave and though my heart may try and stop me The silly way you kiss and the way you never look at me anymore Will encourage me to escape this world I've built around your october eyes And look for a better life where I can count my days on the wings of butterflies. __________________ You're so evil and I'm so good, I'll make it up to you someday.

12-14-2007, 01:30 PM
Dizzys in the wolf Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Ireland Posts: 164	"The silly way you kiss and the way you never look at me anymore" I loved that line, and I liked the line about the moon too. You kinda have a line of confusion running through it and you keep it going well right up to the end. The only problem I have with it is "October eyes" it feels like you kinda over loaded that line somewhere along the way. Nice work. __________________ There’s something about seeing this city at night Where we can say what we want and do what we like. These streets are empty but we don't feel alone, We can run in the dark and sleep on the roads.

12-18-2007, 02:34 PM
ZeppelinAir hahahHAHAHahaha.......ha Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 544	Shouting Boo? thats really the only thing i had a problem with __________________ Little Things "Sittin on a Toilet in a house i dont know, looking all around where the toilet paper go. feeling real uneasy, feeling real uncertain, got to wipe my ass again with a plastic shower curtain" Rodney Carrington-Little Things