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Old 02-25-2024, 08:44 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Please give honest feedback on these lyrics.

(there's also a recording but i can't post links yet)

Lighthouse's Peak

I dreamt a ball pit
I was stopping time
As a baby
My dreams are movies
They are moving my eyes
Very Rapidly
Christmas carols
Her name was Carroll White
Junior
And her father
Was named Connor white
Senior

Obey these pages
Like a rapist priest
turning that cheek
My suns are nightshifts
My days are moonlit seas
Lighthouse’s peak
I am Mary
It’s necessarily me
To take the picture
Of the heaven
That we all live in, please
Take the picture

I am singing
I am singing a song (i am going to sing)
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Old 02-26-2024, 06:15 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Hey wasg I gotta give it to you elliotlevi these are some fire ass lyrics. Could I hear the recording? Because I'm curious to hear the rhythm and flow of the song you're writing.
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Old 02-26-2024, 05:11 PM   #3 (permalink)
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i dmed it to you
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Old 03-05-2024, 01:32 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Its great. I like the folky vibe
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