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the power123456 03-26-2013 05:09 PM

Sometimes - Hoping to get some feedback on this and hopefully find someone to perform
 
Sometimes I just don’t understand,
The ways that you make me feel,
I know your times in high demand,
But why can’t you ever seal the deal.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.

You’re looking close but you’re never near,
Sometimes I’m too far but I still speak,
I keep nearby, but you’re regretting me dear,
And you’re saying the words that make me weak.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.

Maybe I can fight for you with my life,
Maybe I can surprise you some way,
Maybe my hearts been stabbed with a knife,
Sometimes I don’t feel so good like today.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.

Some times I feel like I’ve been hit by a truck,
Just to keep sane, I put my pride on the line,
I’m just a guy, who doesn’t have much luck,
But It’s always you that makes everything fine.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.

the power123456 04-03-2013 05:52 PM

any feedback on the lyrics? :)

scleaves 04-04-2013 01:07 AM

"Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me."

Gets repetitive. Mix it up with a one word variation such as for example, "Hey!"

the power123456 04-10-2013 07:31 AM

i get what ya mean thanks for reading :)

maniac 05-30-2013 08:18 AM

stop d repetition bt it ws kolllllll


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