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Old 03-26-2013, 06:09 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Post Sometimes - Hoping to get some feedback on this and hopefully find someone to perform

Sometimes I just donít understand,
The ways that you make me feel,
I know your times in high demand,
But why canít you ever seal the deal.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.

Youíre looking close but youíre never near,
Sometimes Iím too far but I still speak,
I keep nearby, but youíre regretting me dear,
And youíre saying the words that make me weak.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.

Maybe I can fight for you with my life,
Maybe I can surprise you some way,
Maybe my hearts been stabbed with a knife,
Sometimes I donít feel so good like today.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.

Some times I feel like Iíve been hit by a truck,
Just to keep sane, I put my pride on the line,
Iím just a guy, who doesnít have much luck,
But Itís always you that makes everything fine.

Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me.
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Old 04-03-2013, 06:52 PM   #2 (permalink)
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any feedback on the lyrics?
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Old 04-04-2013, 02:07 AM   #3 (permalink)
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"Maybe I will write to you a song,
That I can play for you all night long,
Maybe then you could see,
All the things I want for you and me."

Gets repetitive. Mix it up with a one word variation such as for example, "Hey!"
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Old 04-10-2013, 08:31 AM   #4 (permalink)
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i get what ya mean thanks for reading
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Old 05-30-2013, 09:18 AM   #5 (permalink)
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stop d repetition bt it ws kolllllll
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