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Old 06-19-2005, 04:20 AM  
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Default Almost Happy

Almost Happy

Step on the insect life,
I'll erase you,
Make all the darkness hide,
I'll erase you,
You couldn't understand me,
I'll erase you,
Nothing will set me free,
I'll erase you,
Close enough to taste the fear,
I'll erase you,

I'm nothing almost Happy,
I'm gone almost Happy,
I'm nothing almost Happy,
I'm gone almost Happy,

Clean all the jagged parts,
I'll erase you,
Make something stick to your heart,
I'll erase you,
The plague of the bucolic,
I'll erase you,
Making my sickness so ironic,
I'll erase you,
Who needs the love,
I'll erase you,

I'm nothing almost Happy,
I'm gone almost Happy,
I'm nothing almost Happy,
I'm gone almost Happy,

I'm nothing almost Happy,
I'm gone almost Happy,
I'm nothing almost Happy,
I'm gone almost Happy,

Never happy,
Never happy.


thoughts please...i hope this one is slightly less cliched...
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Old 06-19-2005, 08:25 AM  
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If you take away all the 'I'll erase you' bits I like it!!
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Old 06-21-2005, 05:11 PM  
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^ the I'll erase you bits are the only good thing about this song.

While feeling depressed is a natural part of the teenage existance, writing lyrics like

Quote:
You couldn't understand me,
I'll erase you,
Nothing will set me free,
I'll erase you,
are no excuse.

re-word this to make it sounds less angsty. Sounds like something Linkin Park would do...

by the way what is bucolic?
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