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Old 07-09-2005, 12:16 AM   #1 (permalink)
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I wrote this me self... he-he this is my first post on this site...
Tell me if something goes wrong-- Demon

Heat under the Stars

Somewhere, out there
I never could find where you are…
I’m scared, because I can’t bear
The way you are
Could your heart stop beating,
From the heat under the stars?

Now I’m left far below,
I’m lost, and I can’t seem to find my heart
I know you’re out there somewhere,
I could feel the heat under the stars

I’m left… with scars
I find you, I can’t find me, I can’t find the person you are!
But soon I’ll create a path to follow,
And a jar to keep me warm,
I know I will always be guided,
By the heat under the stars!

My world, is gore
Filled with violence
Filled with pain and war….
Now my love for you burns harder,
But soon will be tar
Quickly I will crawl,
Guided by the heat under the stars!

Love is the heat under the stars
Left with these scars
My love for you is tar
But the thought of you will keep me warm!
Guided by the heat under the stars!

Heat under the stars (repeat 2)

to my gramps whom past away, and gave me a new pc...
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Old 07-09-2005, 06:21 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I like the line "Heat under the stars", but i'm confused on the rest of the song, you seem to go through two sepertate moods.

also constantly refering to your "heart" is kinda overdone. and by kinda i mean really
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Old 07-11-2005, 09:42 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Really, that is what I going for. I believe that my lyrics are wierdly written, but its all between the lines and inside the music...
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Old 07-12-2005, 06:02 AM   #4 (permalink)
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i think u should try and not repeat a word like "heart" too much. think about something that could mean the heart? just a suggestion!
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