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07-09-2005, 12:16 AM
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Groupie
Join Date: Jul 2005
Posts: 14
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Heat Under The Stars
I wrote this me self... he-he this is my first post on this site...
Tell me if something goes wrong-- Demon Heat under the Stars Somewhere, out there I never could find where you are… I’m scared, because I can’t bear The way you are Could your heart stop beating, From the heat under the stars? Now I’m left far below, I’m lost, and I can’t seem to find my heart I know you’re out there somewhere, I could feel the heat under the stars I’m left… with scars I find you, I can’t find me, I can’t find the person you are! But soon I’ll create a path to follow, And a jar to keep me warm, I know I will always be guided, By the heat under the stars! My world, is gore Filled with violence Filled with pain and war…. Now my love for you burns harder, But soon will be tar Quickly I will crawl, Guided by the heat under the stars! Love is the heat under the stars Left with these scars My love for you is tar But the thought of you will keep me warm! Guided by the heat under the stars! Heat under the stars (repeat 2) to my gramps whom past away, and gave me a new pc... |
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07-09-2005, 06:21 PM
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Music Addict
Join Date: Feb 2004
Location: JMU
Posts: 3,143
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I like the line "Heat under the stars", but i'm confused on the rest of the song, you seem to go through two sepertate moods.
also constantly refering to your "heart" is kinda overdone. and by kinda i mean really |
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07-11-2005, 09:42 PM
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Groupie
Join Date: Jul 2005
Posts: 14
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Really, that is what I going for. I believe that my lyrics are wierdly written, but its all between the lines and inside the music...
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07-12-2005, 06:02 AM
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Music Addict
Join Date: Jul 2005
Posts: 135
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i think u should try and not repeat a word like "heart" too much. think about something that could mean the heart? just a suggestion!
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