_The_Repeats_

Thom sings this one...damn him (it sounds better with his voice, but I'm still going to strop). I wrote the lyrics though and the main riff, so you know... Let me know what you think, this one is a bit odd.


Red and white,
Red and white,
It must do something,
It must do something,

Borders and crossings,
Borders and crossings,
Mark where I can not go,
Mark where I can not go.

On routing I depend,
On routing I depend.

2, 3, 4...

These same old streets,
These same old streets,
That glow in the night,
That shimmer in the light.

But I miss you,
Yeah, I miss you.
The c and f,
The c and f.

On routing I depend,
On routing I depend.

My home is a safe,
Comfortable but restrictive pace,
My home is a safe,
Comfortable but restrictive pace,
My home is a safe,
Comfortable but restrictive pace,
My home is a safe,
Comfortable but restrictive pace,

On routing I depend,
On routing I depend,
On routing I depend…



Sshhh, just because I'm odd... >_<

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I never wanted to love you, but that's okay...
I always knew that you'd leave me anyway.

You're treading on awfully thin ice darling,
it's so awfully thin.
It's almost turning to water,
as
we
speak.

*~~#You.Are.Too.Far.Gone.^'||¬.

TheBig3KilledMyRainDog

don't repeat, might work

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Fenixpunk

the repeating could work well if you have 2 vocalists harmonizing going back and forth

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TheBig3KilledMyRainDog

yeah thats not a bad idea Fenix but in moderation. If you did it that way (2 voices) and did it for the whole song, it would come off as a gimmick. Don't focus on rhyming or anything, get a melody and make it stick to that, no matter what you say it will come off alot more, "authentic" than if your force rhyme or in this case repeat. I don't think thats definitly what you were going for, but in case it was...

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“The night falls gracefully for those who have a love to call their own. But alas, for those to whom love has turned a blind eye – love, it falls like a guillotine”

“No more waiting for fate to befall me, no. I have my dreamboat, and together we will find our destiny, choose our ladder to the sky” - Markus Pierson

riseagainstrocks

the repitition was grating.

i like spazzy songs and this has the potential to be cool, but seriously, like Big said, drop almost all that repetition

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